Just a gloomy day..........
Right now it's snowing and I believe we are to receive at 2 to 3 inches of snow today. It kind of sucks because I actually wanted to go to school and complete my long test for Literature class and to do some my skills for my Certified Nursing Assistant class. Since I drive to school, my mom offered to take me or to stay home. I decided to stay home
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You have been rejected, Britt. Right now the other moderators and I feel you need to work on your style a bit more. You do show signs of promise, but we'd like to see how you develop yourself on your own a bit. If you can show us that you are willing to look at your own work objectively and accept hard yet constructive criticism on your work then we will be glad to accept another application from you. At the moment, we don't have a lot of evidence of your reactions to criticism and that is a core tenet of our community. Please feel free to apply again in a few months and we will re-evaluate your application.
Some of our members did submit some suggestions for you. These are just things that we think you could improve on as a writer. Ravyn suggests that (we understand that 'Destiny' is a tribute to Christine Feehan we do suggest that you give credit to the original author. Otherwise someone might think you're taking credit for 'Dark Destiny’, which is the book we recognized the storyline from.
My recommendation is that you work on your summaries a bit. Your summary is the first chance you get to hook an audience and can mean the difference between success and failure as an author. I recommend that you take a look at the summaries that get your attention and try to pinpoint what exactly it is about them that makes them appealing to you!
JaneDrew has mentioned that you describe a bit too much, using short sentences and going over EVERY single thing about a person, or in a room, etc. While description is good, after a while it can get tedious. Remember, your reader has to slog through it all to get to the good parts. Description is a balancing act. Try to keep descriptions down to one or two medium paragraphs and alternate them with action. She also recommends taking some time to read things over before you post them, to get an idea of how they flow, if your imagery makes sense, and if the overall chapter has a structure. Sometimes it’s best to let a fic sit for a little while until you’re less focused on it.
We do apologize for any misunderstandings, Britt. You have received your answer. We did not lose your application. Thank you for applying to Triumvirata!
-The Dragon’s Daughter
… on Behalf of the Mod Squad
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