Comments | brennanspeaks: BSG Fic: "Beyond the Line" (1/10)

brennanspeaks

BSG Fic: "Beyond the Line" (1/10)

Jun 30, 2009 02:13

So, I'm breaking my own rule and posting the first chapter of this fic before the conclusion is completely written. Partly I'm bowing to rap541's demand for more plotty Gaeta gen fic. Partly, I'm looking to feed my poor deprived muses some reviews to keep them going. Mostly, this is a promise to myself that I will have the last chapters *finished* in ( Read more... )

btl, fan fiction, gaeta, adama

Comments 24

trovia June 30 2009, 09:00:00 UTC

This is great! And intriguing. While I find it a bit hard to fathom that Gaeta wouldn't have thought of bugs in the cell (The guard betraying them? Yes. Forgetting something? No. :D), I still love all of this. It looks like a lot of different characters are going to be part of this which is great. I loved the little moment between Tigh and Kara. It felt right and very IC for both of them. I also like how the last part was all dialogue.

brennanspeaks June 30 2009, 20:05:29 UTC

I'm glad you're intrigued! I settled on bugging the cell because on watching "Disquiet," it seemed so ridiculous that Felix would sit in Zarek's cell and calmly discuss overthrowing the government without the slightest fear of being overheard. I'm glad you thought the rest of it was in character. I hope you keep reading!

irradiatedsoup June 30 2009, 12:29:28 UTC

This is a fantastic premise, looking forward to the next part. :DDD

brennanspeaks June 30 2009, 20:06:08 UTC

Glad you think so! More will be up in a few days.

gentlehobbit June 30 2009, 12:47:32 UTC

I really like this. Your description at the beginning mentioned a focus on Gaeta and Adama, and your first chapter had some good examination of the thoughts, fears and assumptions both by the other would-be mutineers and by Tigh and Starbuck. I'm really looking forward to seeing the interplay between Gaeta and Adama, whether in thoughts, actions or wods.

brennanspeaks June 30 2009, 20:08:22 UTC

Thanks for reading! I wanted to use this first chapter to set up some of the other important character dynamics, because the next chapter deals pretty heavily with the Old Man.

lorrainemarker June 30 2009, 13:00:08 UTC

This is an interesting direction. It could easily have gone this way and I look forward to seeing how you carry it through.

brennanspeaks June 30 2009, 20:09:27 UTC

Thanks! I had a lot of fun setting this up. It gets rather dark in later chapters.

rap541 June 30 2009, 14:10:46 UTC

Oh this is a lot of fun. Poor Gaeta caught out..... and now Bill has to deal with the potential and the other members of the crew who have a problem with his Cylon love.

brennanspeaks June 30 2009, 20:10:50 UTC

Glad you're enjoying! Yep, both Felix and Bill are in for a bunch of no-good-very-bad days. I hope you like where this goes.