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[phineas_gatsby]

This is a continuation of the untitled story I began awhile ago.

Title: Dinner (boring, I know, but I'm not good at titles)
Author: Finny (me)
Rating: PG? Pushing PG-13
Spoilers: Up 'til episode 5
Disclaimer: If you think that I own these characters, I have a gorgeous bridge in New York that I'd like to sell you.

Comments

[juno_chan]

I love how your fics, instead of being this big, overblown things, show us the little moments that may have occured that we didn't get to see.

I loved Rex's back and forth over whether he should sleep with Bree, and deciding that it would be cruel to hurt her that way. And I loved his realizing that the very thing that was driving him crazy, Bree's domineering nature, was the thing that had attracted him to her in the first place, because I think that's very true, given what we know about Rex. ^_~ I also loved Bree's explanation at the end of why she embarrassed Andrew, and Rex's own guilt.

Both Bree and Rex feel extremely in character to me, and their internal dialogues feel spot-on. Best of all, the flow from Rex's thoughts to Bree's thoughts flows naturally, instead of jerkily or in a way that interrupts the flow of the story. It's hard to switch character POV without making the story feel choppy, but you manage to do it, so major kudos to you!

Hope to see more from you soon! I definitely loved this. :D

[phineas_gatsby]

Thank you!

Coming from you, someone whose stories I love for their realism, that feels really good.

And I think that Rex has always been a man in search of a dominatrix, perhaps subconsciously at first, but I liked that as his "fetish," because it's something that you can understand a man who's in love with Bree wanting.

[phineas_gatsby]

Thanks! I think that I picked Bree as my favorite (from the first episode...) because I can see myself becoming like her in another twenty years. So I can kind of empathize with her wanting so much to make him happy, becoming so focused on being a wife and a mother that she forgets to be a woman, too. What she really wants is to make him happy, and nothing she does is exactly bad; she's just gotten out of control. And I always found it so heartbreaking that they just didn't know what to say to each other, even though they clearly loved each other very much. Thanks again for reading.

[zimbalist]

love it! what juno_chan said.

[wannabe_caz]

Did he have to move her hand away? :( I loved it :)