pokemon; Forever, And Everything In-Between | Lucas/Barry/Dawn, Riley/Dawn

[kitsuneasika]

Title: Forever, And Everything In-Between
Pairing: Lucas/Barry/Dawn, Riley/Dawn
Summary: It takes her two weeks before she speaks to Riley about what brought her to Iron Island. Ten, twenty, and all the years in-between.
Disclaimer: I don't own Pokemon.
Notes: This was written for the first round of pokeprompts's March Madness tournament. The prompt was the

Comments

[caddyeverafter7]

I thought this was so precious. The interactions between Dawn and Barry and Lucas were so precious and I just ... loved this so much. It was so clear and so beautifully written. <3

[izarith]

gotta love the OT3, man B)
tbh i've never shipped barry/lucas/dawn as a threesome before, but this might change things... oh yes indeed it might o3o
anyways, this is so precious, and so well written! the end especially... ah, be still my heart. &hearts and the way you wrote it out of order really adds a certain je ne sais quoi~
lovely work bb!

[ibuberu]

I love the ending, it's really tragic irony at it's best. Personally I liked the way you handled Dawn's relationship with Lucas and Barry, they were balanced and showed the sides of her character. However, I think the relationship between Lucas and Barry could have been better developed, especially because I would think they'd have more 'issues' with one another than with Dawn, being awkward boys and all that.

Also, Riley's role wasn't too apparent here, and Dawn seemed a little desperate when she tried to relate Riley to a combination of Lucas and Barry, I felt a tad sad when I read that ;; while I do like how you start and end with Riley's role, I think his part could have been better showcased.