Harry Potter Fic: Unspecial

[bratanimus]

Title: Unspecial
Author: bratanimus
Summary: “I rush to the window and fling it wide, grateful that another friend lives another day, and I start crying suddenly and fully, as if it were a mere continuation of an ongoing wail, which I suppose it probably is.” In wartime, a pregnant Lily discovers the cost of being normal. Remus and Lily friendship.
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[seer_of_spots]

That was really beautiful. I loved the language and the structure - the light-hearted section in the middle was exquisitely written.

My three favourite parts/phrases were this: He grimaces back. His brow seems permanently furrowed these days, and it breaks my heart. I wonder what’s happened to my face that other people can see.
and this:
And I watch as his eyebrows contort into a shape I’ve never seen before on him, and he looks away. I take his face gently in my hands and bring his gaze back to me. How much worse can this get? Bad as it was, I’d thought it was just Astrid. I speak as gently as I can over my pounding heart. “Remus.” And there’s every chance he won’t answer this question. “Was Astrid pregnant?”

He looks positively afraid of me as his eyes dart back and forth between mine. And he exhales quickly, but it’s not a sob because he won’t cry. As I stare into his eyes I suddenly know where the furrow came from. And still he doesn’t answer me, because he doesn’t have to.
and this:
And suddenly he sobs once, violently, and it startles me, though it’s over as quickly as it happened. He swallows and nods, quiet once more.

The sobbing gets me, I think. And the eyebrow contortions.

I can't wait to see anything else you've written! This was INSPIRED.

[bratanimus]

I can't believe I haven't replied to this wonderful review yet! I think I overlooked it when I went back to make my replies. *blush*

Anyhow, THANK YOU. I really appreciate your kind words. Glad you liked the structure and the language. Thanks especially for pointing out the sections that resonated with you; as an author, that kind of feedback is like gold. ;)

Thanks again!