Comments | boughten_bliss: Small Steps, 4/?

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Small Steps, 4/?

Mar 19, 2007 04:06

( There was utter chaos downstairs when Harry finally forced himself to leave the Pensieve. )

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I hope you don't mind constructive criticism... house_illrepute March 19 2007, 14:02:22 UTC

I really like this storyline. I've read all four parts of this in one sitting. Good job! I really like the tone of the fic and Draco and Neville's friendship. I'm not quite sure about Luna's characterization, but you've only given us a couple paragraphs of her, so not enough to make any real assessment. But there was something poignant about her line: And it had been so long since I had been able to just sit and watch life happenAlso, I meant to comment this before in one of the other parts, but you do a wonderful job at SHOWING us rather than TELLING us. There are little bits of characterizations that you pepper thru-out the story (in particular parts 2 & 3) that are wonderful for this! It's really easy to fall into the trap of prose-explanation when it comes to feelings and what someone was thinking or meaning, and so far, you've done well to not do that. Good job ( ... )

Re: I hope you don't mind constructive criticism... willfully March 19 2007, 18:44:20 UTC

HEE. I adore constructive criticism, and I think you've made some very good points. I was planning to get this to a beta after it was finished, because it's a present and therefore I want it done quickly, but I'm starting to think maybe I should have done that now rather than later :D

Shall keep all of that in mind! And thank you for the review, as well!

pinkelephant42 March 19 2007, 15:51:03 UTC

Luna is wonderful. You know I adore your Luna.

The relationship between Harry and Draco is love. So much angst!

Love! And *Snuggles* :)

willfully March 19 2007, 18:46:52 UTC

And I only barely do justice to your Neville XDD

Haha! Love, angst, same thing. *adores!*

auroranq March 19 2007, 16:34:34 UTC

This is brilliant so far. Hope you get the next bit up soon!
Your Neville is so calm....he's all grown up! :O awwww

willfully March 19 2007, 18:48:18 UTC

Thank you! I shall try :D
(He could use a bit of snuggling. *snuggles and luffs on him*)

nomeci March 19 2007, 18:03:13 UTC

wow - I just found this story and have read all four chapters... I love this and can not wait to see where you take it!

willfully March 19 2007, 18:48:52 UTC

Thank you! :D

serpentqueen13 March 19 2007, 20:07:04 UTC

Lovelovelove....love you twinness.

Yay Luna/Neville. I love Luna. Now let's have Fire run to his Blood and bitch and I will be a happy evil bunny.

willfully March 19 2007, 20:15:47 UTC

Love you tooooo!

I adore Luna, but you know this. And YES. There shall be Blood and Fire and bitching and I'm going to bug you about keeping Blood IC because I've never really tried to write her before, kay? ♥

serpentqueen13 March 19 2007, 20:48:59 UTC

Of course, you may bug as you need to, I bother you about Fire enough. *snuggles* ♥