Comments | bookaddict43: Studying

bookaddict43

Studying

Jul 02, 2007 22:33

Title: Studying
Author: Bookaddict
Characters: River, Simon, Kaylee, Jayne
Rating: PG
Word count: 100
Comments: originally written for firefly100. Prompt: watch

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jayne, prompt: watch, simon, river, kaylee

Comments 10

brithistorian July 2 2007, 13:28:37 UTC

Wow - this is just exceedingly well done. You've conveyed so much here, without having much actually happening. A gem of a scene.

I think this is one of the things I find appealing about Firefly fanfics: You can do an active, over-the-to scene (which is where my stories tend to end up), but you can also do this sort of subtle, understated scene (which I think is a wonderful thing, especially when done as well as you have here), and both types of scenes are true to the feel of the original.

bookaddict43 July 3 2007, 13:54:09 UTC

Thank you! You're comment did wonders for my ego! I like fics with characters observing others. I'm glad you think it worked :)

mercsgoodgirl July 2 2007, 17:50:46 UTC

I totally agree with brithistorian.

This is wonderful. Almost like a snapshot capturing so much in so little. I love pieces that convey so much with so little. (And gorramnit, I'm just wordy as hell...)

bookaddict43 July 3 2007, 13:56:13 UTC

*giggles* do you know how long it took me to get to 100 words? Thank you *bows*

Love your icon btw...

ladytalon1 July 2 2007, 22:26:10 UTC

whuh? I thought I commented already! LJ must have eaten my comment this morning or something. I love how you show Jayne's private vs. public self here, and how Simon is seeing it for the first time and realizing just what it means *GLOMPS*

bookaddict43 July 3 2007, 13:58:01 UTC

Naughty LJ *slaps it*. Jayne's pretty good at covering up. I'm glad River made Simon look at a few things.

ceslas July 2 2007, 23:51:32 UTC

“Oh,” said Simon blankly.

“Fascinating,” said River.

River and Simon have such an interesting shorthand that I find really tough to work with, but it feels so well phrased and the scene is set so cleanly that it makes sense here. Well done darlin'.

bookaddict43 July 3 2007, 14:00:24 UTC

I figure the two siblings have long since worked out how to communicate. Glad you think it makes sense.

romanceguru July 3 2007, 05:01:46 UTC

Damn you woman, you tricked me into reading Jaylee!

Anyways, I love the image of Jayne standing there all vulnerable and exposed… At least that’s the picture I got. ; )

bookaddict43 July 3 2007, 14:02:20 UTC

Ah ha! *rubs hands together* My evil plan comes to light :)

Jayne being exposed and vulnerable was just what I was aiming for! *bounces*