[Fic: Hockey RPS] Drag me Through this Orchestrated Mess (Final Revision); Edler/Seidenberg; PG-13
Last in revisions for Challenge #13. This is Challenge #13c, which asked for:
If you participated in Part 1 and Part 2, you now have a story less than 250 words. Your goal now is to pare it down so that your story is between 100-125 words
If you've read the original ( here), then feel free to skim over this one.
Drag me through this Orchestrated Mess Final revision
Alex Edler/Dennis Seidenberg; PG-13; 125 words
Drag me through this Orchestrated Mess
Alex Edler always tries to keep calm. But, when Sami went down the way he had, Alex realized how powerless he was.
He gets his belongings together before leaving the locker room.
"Still here, eh?" Seidenberg asks, as Alex emerges from the room.
Seidenberg was the one who checked Ebbett. Alex also knows he's the one who prevented him from reaching Salo.
Alex lands a right hook on Seidenberg's cheek. Seidenberg stumbles slightly, before punching Alex back.
They continue to tussle until Alex is pinned to the locker room wall. Seidenberg grabs Alex's wrists, crushes their lips together in a brutal kiss.
When Seidenberg bites Alex's lip; Alex whimpers.
Alex is shaken awake by Kevin.
"Just landed in Florida," Kevin says at Alex's questioning gaze.
If you participated in Part 1 and Part 2, you now have a story less than 250 words. Your goal now is to pare it down so that your story is between 100-125 words
If you've read the original ( here), then feel free to skim over this one.
Drag me through this Orchestrated Mess Final revision
Alex Edler/Dennis Seidenberg; PG-13; 125 words
Drag me through this Orchestrated Mess
Alex Edler always tries to keep calm. But, when Sami went down the way he had, Alex realized how powerless he was.
He gets his belongings together before leaving the locker room.
"Still here, eh?" Seidenberg asks, as Alex emerges from the room.
Seidenberg was the one who checked Ebbett. Alex also knows he's the one who prevented him from reaching Salo.
Alex lands a right hook on Seidenberg's cheek. Seidenberg stumbles slightly, before punching Alex back.
They continue to tussle until Alex is pinned to the locker room wall. Seidenberg grabs Alex's wrists, crushes their lips together in a brutal kiss.
When Seidenberg bites Alex's lip; Alex whimpers.
Alex is shaken awake by Kevin.
"Just landed in Florida," Kevin says at Alex's questioning gaze.