FIC: The Carriage held but just Ourselves (Pt. 6/10)

[blue_fjords]

Title: The Carriage held but just Ourselves (Pt. 6/10)
Author: blue_fjords
Rating: PG-13
Characters: Gwen, Andy, Tosh, Jack, Ianto, Owen, Gerald Carter
Word length: 2533
Disclaimer: I own nothing.
Summary: Crime novel AU w/ alternating POVs from Gwen and Jack.

A/N: Kudos to my beta, paragraphs, for her invaluable help and support. All mistakes are mine!

Comments

[fide_et_spe]

This is wonderful. I'm surprised that you are writing fewer chapters now, I think it should consist of 32

[blue_fjords]

Oi! I don't like the long drawn-out stuff. If it can be accomplished in fewer words, then it should be (that's just my personal preference). Also, I'm really not digging the WIP format. I don't think I have the right temperament for it! So 9 sections, most like. :)

I did like bringing Andy back into the mix. He's such a sweetheart.

Formica = my idea of a cheap table. They're the type you find in diners in the US. But I guess I'll change this to compressed wood. And I have had beer in about a thousand fics! That's a lot of going back. Okay, so, Andy has a case of beer in his kitchen -- he would call it lager? Or as far as a brand name -- Brains? That's the one I see most often in fics...

[fide_et_spe]

Hi yes Brains I guess, you don't see it in England, but even Budwieser say, would have lager on the bottle, so you might ask for a bottle of budweiser as it were.. In fact I was just thinking about it as I was listening to The Sin Eaters (again) and he was talking about drinking lager. It's one of those things where beer isn't totally incorrect, just not used much at all. It's a real word as it were. But yes, people say lager.

I think pine is fine for the table, it is the most likely substance. You can say MDF, which is compressed wood, but then you may find Americans reading won't know what that is!

I was of course joking about the chapters! I just meant I loved this so wanted more. I agree with you, I think it's good if there is an AU that works really well, just to write a few stories set in it.

[paragraphs]

When we were in Cardiff, it was Brains Brains Brains. Our hosts talked with us about beer...either they were being polite or they just use the word themselves. LOL. That is interesting! Lager sounds so much more refined for some reason.

Formica--yikes! I didn't think about that. Sneaky word, lol.

[fide_et_spe]

Thing is, like I said, beer a word you can use, but it would be a bit odd to do so. I think people would use it if speaking to tourists say. It's just not very colloquial. I seriously can't think of a time I've been out with friends and anyone has said they fancy a beer (I don't drink the stuff myself) But if they did I would notice, but it would still make sense so you wouldn't question it.

[paragraphs]

LOL Yeah our hosts--they deal with people from all over, so I'm sure talking to a German and an American, they didn't think twice about it. BEER! (and I don't like it either, but I gamely tried Brains. LOL).

[blue_fjords]

Okay, Britpickin' changes made! :D

Heh, I was just thinking about what chapter 26 would be like of this: Gwen goes to the store b/c they're out of milk and has a vision of Emily Dickinson doing the can-can; Jack breaks a nail and fantasizes about Ianto sucking on his finger.

[fide_et_spe]

The finger sucking scene is at least three paragraphs, there you go. Then Ianto has some man pain about Lisa guilt because he lay with Jack, oh no. He may even weep man tears.

[elainasaunt]

OMG, your icons! Frowny-face Ianto, and JB from Cage - it's not just the jawline, it's the cheekbones. And the arched brow. And the kerchief! <3333

[fide_et_spe]

That JB one is by madder_rose, she has some great La Cage icons.

[fide_et_spe]

Oh and the winning pout icon is by cowboy hd.