Hey! I read through both versions and here are some thoughts. Note: If you could give me a short intro or copy paste the specific instructions that the school gave you for the essay, I'll have a better of idea of what to look for. Also, are you applying specifically to an fine arts program
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Thanks for the feedback! :) I really appreciate it.
There are two prompts for two essays. The first one is "Please submit a personal essay containing information that you identify as being important about yourself other than the facts and figures already given in this application. You may write about an experience, accomplishment or future plans. Remember that Warren Wilson College has a unique approach to education through its Triad of Academics, Work (15 hours a week), Service Learning (25 hours per year), and a strong commitment to the environment and cross-cultural understanding."
The second is "What is it about Warren Wilson that makes you think it might be a particularly good match for you?"
The break in the essay before the last three paragraphs is the break between the first and second essay. I've revised it a bit since I posted this version.
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There are two prompts for two essays. The first one is "Please submit a personal essay containing information that you identify as being important about yourself other than the facts and figures already given in this application. You may write about an experience, accomplishment or future plans. Remember that Warren Wilson College has a unique approach to education through its Triad of Academics, Work (15 hours a week), Service Learning (25 hours per year), and a strong commitment to the environment and cross-cultural understanding."
The second is "What is it about Warren Wilson that makes you think it might be a particularly good match for you?"
The break in the essay before the last three paragraphs is the break between the first and second essay. I've revised it a bit since I posted this version.
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