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I got a total of 3 reviews for Ch. 5...which is a new record :) However...one of the reviews just... grr...
Excerpt from Ch. 5 (parts bolded for emphasis):
“Sir, we made a terrible mistake. Tseng, sir, he is…alive.”
Rufus froze and slowly looked up from the proposal, “What?”
One of Rufus’ bodyguard visibly shuddered at how dark and cold the blonde’s tone had gotten.
Dorian Red fidgeted nervously, “Reeve’s robot found Tseng severely wounded in the Temple. When Reeve’s first Cait Sith was crushed by the Temple we assumed Tseng met with the same fate.”
“But…”
“But today we received a letter from a man in Mideel. A bunch of fishermen saw the Temple shrink and steered closer to the island for a better look. They spotted Tseng lying on the beach and brought him to Mideel. They cared for him but he was hurt badly and fell into a coma. They searched for ID but it must’ve fallen out of Tseng’s jacket and his mobile was smashed. A few days ago Tseng awoke from his coma and was able to tell them who he was so they contacted us.”
“So…you let me think that my best Turks was dead…when he was not. A very talented young man was promoted into the Turks. That costs money you know…”
“Sir, I…I’m so sorry.” The man nearly whispered.
Review of Ch. 5:
Kick ass story, but...... Tseng's alive in AC.......
That just... grr... it like really pissed me off. It's obvious they didn't even bother reading the story. They skimmed over the summary (or maybe even just glanced at the title) then decided to give me a subtle slam in the form of a compliment. I hate when people do that.
If it hadn't been for Jennie and Sam's reviews the smile probably would have been totally wiped off my face. So thanks to you both for taking the time to give me feedback. I truly appreciate it.
Excerpt from Ch. 5 (parts bolded for emphasis):
“Sir, we made a terrible mistake. Tseng, sir, he is…alive.”
Rufus froze and slowly looked up from the proposal, “What?”
One of Rufus’ bodyguard visibly shuddered at how dark and cold the blonde’s tone had gotten.
Dorian Red fidgeted nervously, “Reeve’s robot found Tseng severely wounded in the Temple. When Reeve’s first Cait Sith was crushed by the Temple we assumed Tseng met with the same fate.”
“But…”
“But today we received a letter from a man in Mideel. A bunch of fishermen saw the Temple shrink and steered closer to the island for a better look. They spotted Tseng lying on the beach and brought him to Mideel. They cared for him but he was hurt badly and fell into a coma. They searched for ID but it must’ve fallen out of Tseng’s jacket and his mobile was smashed. A few days ago Tseng awoke from his coma and was able to tell them who he was so they contacted us.”
“So…you let me think that my best Turks was dead…when he was not. A very talented young man was promoted into the Turks. That costs money you know…”
“Sir, I…I’m so sorry.” The man nearly whispered.
Review of Ch. 5:
Kick ass story, but...... Tseng's alive in AC.......
That just... grr... it like really pissed me off. It's obvious they didn't even bother reading the story. They skimmed over the summary (or maybe even just glanced at the title) then decided to give me a subtle slam in the form of a compliment. I hate when people do that.
If it hadn't been for Jennie and Sam's reviews the smile probably would have been totally wiped off my face. So thanks to you both for taking the time to give me feedback. I truly appreciate it.