3. Leave Out All the Rest - Viper-Desi
Note: Suethor is very sensitive to being told that her fanfic has problems. Please handle with caution, particularly since she did make some attempt to finish her fanfic, despite it not being the best in the world. She deserves some credit for that. That, and she has taken some critique into consideration.
Title: Leave Out All the Rest
Name: Sachi Shiba
Suethor: Viper-Desi Rating: 3 - Kenpachi
Discription: “Long black-violet hair, usually down and bangs that sweep to the right. Grapy eyes. Short. Appears to be 9 to 10. Bust same as Rukia's” Which is an improvement over having a bust just a size smaller then Rangiku's. “130 years old (World of the Living=11) (later)equivilent 13 year old.” “Height 3'12” (later)4'2” ” Again, an improvement considering that her Sue used to be older then Toshiro.
Pairing: Hitsugaya Toshiro
Possessions: A zampaktuo with a believable Shikai and a believable Bankai. It is an improvement over her last one. Her Shikai used to be one that “changes the users hair and eye color”. Background: She is the daughter of the Kaien and Miyako.
Sue Qualifications: She is a child genius when child genius are supposed to be rare. She enters the academy the exact same year as Toshiro and happens to graduate the same year. Well, she's supposed to graduate in a year like him, but runs away because of her brother's death saying she has no reason to become a shinigami anymore, despite having a ton of friends at the academy. Just because the original reason goes away, doesn't mean that a new one doesn't appear. She's also supposed to learn Bankai at a young age. Way to usurp Toshiro's special of being a child genius. Oh, and Toshiro is romantically inclined towards her despite the fact it is obvious he hasn't quite hit puberty yet in the canon.
Sample:
Chapter 1:
Today is my first day in the Soul Reaper Academy. My mom and dad both congratulated me, but we didn't get to celebrate though. I had to take an entrance exam in order to be accepted. I hated studying for it, but at least I passed it. My reason for starting my exam early is to become a Soul Reaper faster. If I become a Soul Reaper, I'll get to see my parents more often. With that in mind, I kissed my parents goodbye and walked to the academy. Since I lived within walking distance of the school, I took my time. To tell you the truth, I am so nervous. I just know that I will be bullied because of my height. But lets talk about myself first...
My parents were soul reapers. My mother is Miyako Shiba, 3rd Seat of the Thirteenth Division. My father is Kaien Shiba, Lieutenant of the Thirteenth Division. My parents taught me things so I could be more prepared when I went into the academy. I already knew a few of the Kidou spells because of my mom. My father taught me how to wield a sword and hand-to-hand combat. I was really good in both. But sometimes, the kidou would blow up on my face. I would always get mad. It hurts, I lost count at 15...
I remember singing with my mother everytime I would get mad. It would calm me down to say the least. Just the sound of her voice...it was beautiful, just like mine. Every night before bed, she would sing my favorite song. I never had any nightmares because my mom would sing me to sleep. My parents are the world to me. And now I was about to enter the Soul Reaper Academy...I might not be able to see them often and I would miss them. My dad told me to try my best and I would be out of there in no time. I want to be like my parents and be above 4th Seat at least.
I was told that I was the second youngest person to be accepted. I was so happy to be accepted and to be one of the youngest here. I never thought this day would come. Well, I did but not this early. I just hoped that I would meet this other guy. At least I would get to have one new friend in the academy.
Chapter Five:
I felt so much better with everyone here. Even though everyone was here, I still felt somewhat empty. I couldn't cry anymore and I couldn't even smile a real smile. "Sachi, when you graduate tommorrow, we should hang out for a while. We can all celebrate, alright?" said Toushiro. I nodded and gave a little smile.
After an hour, everyone left. I looked out the window and watched the sunset. 'Momo, you are the greatest friend ever. Renji, you are pretty useless at kido, but very fun to mess with. Kira, I can always come to you for anything. Jushi, you are like the uncle I never had. Kiyone and Sentaro, you two always entertain me with your little fights everyday. Rukia, another best friend that I can always count on. And Toushiro, I want to know if you feel the same way I feel about you. I get to know you more and more everyday. You are really funny and easily angered. Today, you made sure I wasn't left alone. I really like you. I just wish I could tell you...I love you...'
I went to my closet and began packing clothes. I grabbed my toothbrush, brush, and a picture with Mother, Father, Jushi, Rukia, and I. I also grabbed another picture with Momo, Kira, and Renji. I grabbed a piece of paper and wrote a letter. Then I got and envelope and stuck it in there. I reached into my shihakusho and pulled out the picture of Toushiro and I and also stuck this into the envelope.
Without my parents here, I have no reason to become a Soul Reaper. They were the reason I wanted to become a Soul Reaper. I'm afraid if I become a Soul Reaper, I will be reminded of my parents everyday. I'm scared and I feel lost without my parents. 'I'm sorry Toushiro, I wanted to tell you...Goodbye, everyone...' I jumped out my window and ran to the Tenth Divsion. I snuck into the room and went to find Toushiro's room.
Passing by a few doors, I finally found his room. I turned the door knob slowly realizing it wasn't locked. 'That's odd. Maybe he forgot to lock it?' I opened the door slowly and looked inside. He wasn't in here. I quickly left the envelope on his nightstand and closed the door. I ran out of the Sereteii and into the Rukongai District. 'Rukia probably already gave my father's body to my Aunt so she should be awake still.' I ran to my Aunt's house outside of the District. I hadn't seen her in years, but she was all I had left. 'I will become stronger for everyone. I wasn't able to protect my parents, but I promise to protect everyone I love.'