Beyond the Yellow Brick Road-Chapter 42-Surrogates-Part 1/4

[plumsuede]

BEYOND THE YELLOW BRICK ROAD-CHAPTER 42-SURROGATES-PART 1/4

ZEEK ZIRROLLI'S POV
here I am
the one that you love

The headline on the front page of the New York Times that Friday morning, April 8, 2011, was one you expected but that did nothing to lessen its impact when you read it:

New York’s Finest Plead Guilty: No Denial, No Trial

You tossed away

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[plumsuede]

i promise i'm not trying to... it's a looooooong chapter.... xoxox

[vlredreign]

Okay, first comment post.

Gabe tossed his spatula in the sink and sat down across from you, “Unfuckingbelievable.”

“I know; it was like I had my own little ass menagerie.”

Gabe stuck his fork in your face, “It's called a 'ménage à trois,' you dolt.”

“It’s called me and my dick and an all-night pass at Great Ass-venture, and let me reassure you, ‘Cakes, it doesn’t get any better than that.”

*snorfle*

Amelia looked at her spoon and then at you, and you shrugged your shoulders, so she turned back to her mother, her tiny sticky hand reaching out and touching Harper's thigh and, therefore, the slip Harper was wearing; her eyes widened as she touched it as if it had magical powers. “'Cause...'cause you're so 'squisite, Mommy....and Daddy....,” and then she reached out and wrapped both of her arms around Harper's legs and hugged them, “'Cause Daddy F- 'Cause Daddy F-C-U... F-U-C-K you in that bery pretty dress.”

“Sam!”

You made a mental note to buy Amelia a very tiny couch for her birthday.ROTFLMAO

[plumsuede]

I LOVE bit-by-bit comedic feedback. these people are so truly screwed up, but they are hilarious as well, and as much as their pain makes me ache, their personalities make me pee on myself sometimes.

and Zeek is just pure comic genesis.

bwahaha.

[ladybugkay]

Although Justin had been ‘gone’ for six years, your reunion-for the most part-felt like slipping back into your favorite pair of jeans that had fallen down-almost forgotten--in the back of your closet. But once you put them back on and started to move around in them, you realized how old they really were, saw that the holes in them were bigger than you remembered, and that there was a bunch of shit in the pockets you’d forgotten all about.

That's the first figurative comparison in a long time that has left me kind of gasping in awe. It's perfect. It's one of those perfect similes that comes along once in a very long while, and I love it.

[plumsuede]

thank you!! so glad you liked that. i really liked it as well, it had real meaning for me, plus i was picturing Brian in those jeans and then i had to stop writing and go take a shower. 0_o

[goddesstar]

Part 1 - Brilliant! I missed this story and was too excited to see an update! You characterizations of Brian and Justin are spot on and the angst just makes it that much more real.

And thanks for making me laugh with the last few paragraphs! Did I mention that you're brilliant?

-Goddesstar

[plumsuede]

thank you, and I'm so glad you laughed. I LOVE THAT. LOVE IT, LOVE IT, LOVE IT!

[damietta]

I love how Brian can make Justin laugh even in a dark time. That's love.

I was surprised at the humor (and ass menagerie will go down as one of the greatest), but you do have to have gallows humor when it is a unbelievably sad day.

Off to more...

[plumsuede]

yes, you do have to have humor on such a sad day..... xooxox