Sestina!fic #2: "A Typical Day in Diagnostics"

[bironic]

Sestina the second, also known as Fun with Alliteration. Slightly different tone from the last one.

Title: A Typical Day in Diagnostics
Characters: Main Cast of House; ~Chase POV
Rating: PG
Word Count: 330
Prompts: Chase, House, Foreman, Cameron, Cuddy, Wilson
A/N: This is the proper/standard format for the end words, if anyone's curious. Thanks

Comments

[bironic]

this one didn't benefit from the juxtaposition. [...] they don't necessarily read well together

Ah, as I feared. These weren't designed to stand alone as a pair; they just happened to be the first two I finished, while the rest are still a few stanzas from completion. Then again, the first, I think, was a hard act to follow anyway.

But I'm very glad you came back for a second go and that it generated such a reaction!

I love the framing with "eight o'clock".

Thanks. I tried to work in a few ways in which the story comes full circle from morning to night, a cycle Chase completes every day: the whiteboard gets scribbled on and erased, Wilson wanders in and saunters off, everyone gets in and goes home, patients are sick and get healed, etc.

"Tripping" and "rolling" and "swirling" -- I like it. Using the characters' names for the prompts ensures that we keep swinging back to everyone, like a ball they're tossing around, tying them together as a team.

Surely Wilson always has a good, solid reason for visiting House.

Of course he does. He's in lurrrrve. Here Chase knows there's a reason and that it's not whatever Wilson says when he shows up.

You've taken the structure of the show [...] and used it in an incredibly structured poem

Form and function! House/sestina OTP.

Thank you so much. I just love your comments.