Sestina!fic #1: House post-infarction

[bironic]

So those sets of six prompts I requested back in September? The big secret is that I've been playing around with some sestinas. (Yes, I am that much of a geek.) For those of you who aren't familiar with the term, it's a type of poem consisting of seven stanzas where the same six words appear at the ends of the lines in a different order in each of

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[simple__man]

I read, let it sink in, came back and read again. That last line is so incredibly powerful, it almost takes a minute for your brain to wrap around the implications of that. And I love the "opposite of painkiller" line, because I could hear it in my head.

I would be so intimidated by this format, but you really did an awesome job with it, and it really works well as a mirror for House's thoughts, the running together-ness of it.

The imagery works so well, but it really is a time bomb, seemingly simple and then, like five or ten minutes later, something explodes and you go, "Oh, that was good..." Love these, look forward to more.

[bironic]

Thank you so much. That's exactly the sort of reaction I was hoping this would evoke. Actually, that's not even true -- what you've described is beyond what I'd hoped for. You've made me feel good all day. :)

I owe a lot to early Season Six BtVS for that last line. I think you'll know what I mean.

Three people so far have singled out the "opposite of painkiller" line, which is fitting, because that's the first line I wrote. Sestinas force you to be creative about how you use the repeated words; as I was thinking about different ways to incorporate "painkiller," that line just came to me, and like you, I could hear House shouting it. The whole poem was then built around that stanza, which I put near the end because I wanted to build up to it. It seems to have worked!

[simple__man]

Good, excellent! My job here is done, you are an excellent feedbacker, and you deserve the same in return.

Oh my yes. The imagery is not lost on me. Seriously, through the day, I kept coming back to that thought. That would be an excellent exploration, btw, of House in comp to Season 6 Buffy...with Wilson as his Spike?

It's a damned good line, and one that opens up your imagination as to just how bad it could be with House after the infarction.

Love, love, love this. I cannot sing your praises enough. Look forward to more.

[bironic]

I'm starting to fear the others aren't going to live up to this! Certainly none of them are as angry.

House in comp to Season 6 Buffy...with Wilson as his Spike

Oh yes. There's so much there. And Wilson for Spike is the next logical substitution. Stacy as Willow, the catalyst who alienates the hero(ine)? And it could culminate in a musical! and then degenerate into a season's worth of very unhealthy sex.

Anyway, if that's a hint, I've got to at least finish the Spike/William one first (the fic I cheated on with these poems).

[simple__man]

I'm sure they will, I believe in you. There are plenty of emotions to plumb in the fandom.

Oh, there MUST be a House musical. Simply must be.

*laughing* Oh no, I've got WAY too many fics on my back burner to ever be guilty of trying to fill up somebody else's stovetop. Not that I'd say no, mind you. Not at all ^^ Spike and William are worth the wait, I'm sure of it. If this is how you cheat, I'm all for it.