SPN fic: Red, Chapter 9/10

[big_pink]

Red Chapter 9/Bait & Switch

Description: Gen, PG-13, WIP, penultimate chapter. Okay, Little Red Riding Hood? Think about it, the story’s all about sex and violence, like most good fairy tales. Except with a whole lot more swearing.

Disclaimer: Blahblahblah, Kripke, blahblahblah.

Knock knock. Who’s there? Beta. Beta who? Beta thank Lemmypie and

Comments

[quellefromage]

Oh, man, this just makes my day. So much good stuff in here, Sam's anger, the description of the ride down the hill was perfect. Every word. Dave telling the story of Lukas and his 'treasures" was perfectly creepy. “I’d want to kill any asshole who stole my toothbrush.”...bwah ha ha.

Eileen in her tree, telling Sam about the donkey, (Oh, Sam, the donkey, just...squeee!) And Dean, wishing the hell that Ruby would shut up, and then, the plans...(and simultaneous, just like in The Usual Suspects!!) And the bait and switch, and coming into the light, bloody and in pain, and Sam and the rocks and stoned Tommy. Not a damned word that I didn't love.

And again, the skillful way you've woven the Red Riding Hood story into this, and made it over into something totally yours, blows me away. It's so subtle and so skilled. I mean, the grannies? Making them tree huggers to integrate them into the story, was bloody brilliant. Sam being a woodsman, and a hunter, and Dean, the morsel that the wolf craves...

Not a bit of this jumps out at you. (Or maybe I'm just incredibly dense, which...maybe so) It's all so seamless, unforced and so integral to the story that we don't see that we've been engrossed in a revved up fairy tale until we're in so deep that we're gonna need Sam with a machete to get us out.

My compliments and my unabashed awe go out to you. This is a wonderful piece of writing.

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I did promise someone a donkey this story. Actually, the donkey thing is true true true. My MIL does the same thing (which is, of course, where I'm getting all the granny stuff). I've just stolen her wholesale. Except I don't think she embroiders. She collages. But that wouldn't have helped Sam sew up the Wolf, would it? "Paste him up with a little of this Elmer's white." And I didn't like to think of the granny as PASSIVE, because I see her as powerful, so I changed it up a little, but kept the character in, as you've pointed out.

I was yelling all through the Usual Suspects, because it was all mirroring what I was writing exactly, right from Dean talking to himself to them 'working together apart', which was my catchphrase for this story. Thanks for the gush...it fair makes my day to know I've made yours.