Broken Souls

[bictory]

Title: Broken Souls
Pairing: Daehyun/Youngjae
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: highlight to read:[character death kinda..? More like dead characters...but not really. Er it'll make sense if you read it OTL]
Word Count: 4.2k
Summary: Just like a puzzle, souls are easier to take apart when one piece is missing.
A/N: pinch hit for kaixian for thebrowniebunch fic exchange! A

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[michelleisat]

Youngjae leans against Daehyun’s shoulder while they watch memory-Daehyun get tired, and collapse in the middle of the grass. “It’s that smile again,” Youngjae says. “How come you don’t smile like that anymore?”

Daehyun not smiling??! Unimaginable! Heartbreaking :( And of course, Jae would notice it :D

“Did you ever go back?” Youngjae looks hopeful, like he can live through Daehyun’s memories.

I feel like I get why Daehyun likes Youngjae, because Jae is so solid and supportive. But I don't get a lot about why Jae likes Dae. So this was great. Maybe the real Jae lives vicariously through Daehyun's impulsiveness ...

Youngjae doesn’t say anything, but there are inexplicable emotions etched in the folds of his frown. He places a hand over Daehyun’s, and they remain in the middle of the field for a long time. The nice thing about being dead is that time doesn’t matter anymore.

Awww quietly, unassumingly supportive Jae.

"Daehyun can’t help smiling a little at his enthusiasm. He glances over, and Youngjae also has a fond look on his face. For some reason, this makes Daehyun feel a little more whole. "

Haha, this was great. I think the real Dae is more embarassed about his enthusiasm than appreciative of it. So it's nice to have him be able to look at himself from the outside and realise it's a good thing! And of course Jae being fond of it. And Dae being fond of Jae being fond, hahaha.

Daehyun feels an unfamiliar warmth take over his cold body, but that’s probably from Youngjae. Youngjae is warm. His heart still isn’t beating.

Dae credits everything to Jae, so true. Also loved Dae afraid of being alone throughout the fic, and his awe at Jae. Because the real Daehyun is both those things.

I feel like I just spammed you, but all this had to be said!<3

[bictory]

ahh I am so late on this but thank you for this comment! I love your little insights on characterization and feelings, they make me feel like I did something right ^^

still waters run deep that is such a nice metaphor *__* I love that image with Youngjae, he is really a thoughtful kid ♥

I'm so glad that it touched you! I'm sorry about the depression, I hope it didn't give you bad memories ;__; /squeezes you, thanks for sharing ;u;

I feel like it'd be hard for Daehyun to smile earnestly if he doesn't have a heart! So yeah...I don't like the thought of Dae losing his smile though >__<

this is never spam! You are the loveliest! I recognized your name from ask fm I think but this gives me a chance to talk to you so that's awesome :3 thank you for reading and this comment, it makes me smile when I read it ^^ ♥

[michelleisat]

You're welcome! I've been a long-time fan of your writing actually (Stuck on a boat! Proclaiming love from the rooftops! Daejae firsts! Youngjae's tempting cheesecake ... Unicorn!), but I never came out showed you appreciation ... so I thought I should :) You write the sweetest Daejae, all these stories have put a grin on my face, even when I was tired / stressed out.

Ah, you recognise me from ask.fm! Good, that means I can click the like button without feeling shy :D Feel free to leave me stuff there / add me on twitter (@michelleisat) if you wanna chat ... Would love to spazz about the boys more <3