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X Marks the Spot: Part One

Feb 01, 2011 08:30

Length: Part One is about 6500 words. Finished story will be about 12k 15k would you believe 20k?.
Tune in next week for the exciting conclusion next exciting installment!
Pairings: None, it's for sg_fignewton's Gen Fic Day.
Season: Post-Stringer for MacGyver; early S2 for Stargate.
Prompt: Mac/Gate crossover, the letter X.

X Marks the Spot

Part One: Bad ( Read more... )

stargate, alphabet soup, macgyver, fic

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lolmac February 2 2011, 02:00:04 UTC

*gets all blushy* I think you just made my day.

idlewild_ February 2 2011, 04:51:35 UTC

Oh, I was so thrilled to see this!!! I have my usual extensive comments to make but very little brain left - the snow has already won. For the moment... Sam's observations of Mac and his similarities and differences to Jack, oh yeah. Particularly the voice thing. Oh yeah.

lolmac February 9 2011, 03:47:01 UTC

*runs around squeeing over lovely extensive comments*

thothmes February 2 2011, 05:36:29 UTC

I like the emendations, especially in that exchange about Somalia, etc. It flows much more naturally to my ear. And the Greeks (er...Greek Cypriots) are acting like the Greeks I know and love and plying people with food!

That boinga! boinga! noise is just me bouncing up and down in place waiting to find out what's going to happen next.

I mentioned before that I love your Mac voice, but this time around what I really appreciated was the Teal'cness of Teal'c. There, quietly, loomingly there, content to remain in the background until required, and when he speaks, everyone can't help but listen. So very much the Jaffa we know and love.

lolmac February 2 2011, 18:47:18 UTC

The feedback was lovely, and you saw the results -- definite improvements! When I filled in on the Somalia exchange, I got that lovely wry observation from Sam, which was delightful.

And I already adore writing Teal'c. He's such a wonderful character! My partner is a Teal'c fangirl, so I'm not likely to forget that he's there -- which does seem to happen sometimes, in the show as well as in fanfic, sigh.

I'm about 1500 words into Part Two, and I yesterday put a shiny new word meter back onto the LOLMac home page!

ETA: Part Two should get posted tomorrow. It's now Part Two of Three instead of Part Two of Two. *facepalm*

magnavox_23 February 4 2011, 11:30:04 UTC

*breathes* hngggggg MOAR! XD

You write the best Mac and omg please let him and Jack make up! *plys with cookies*

lolmac February 9 2011, 03:41:10 UTC

Mmm . . . cookies . . .

The good news: I expect to post Part Two tomorrow, as long as my technical beta is able to get back to me.

Probably also good news: it's turned into a three-parter.

dieastra February 7 2011, 16:44:25 UTC

Aw, Jack with the baby! Such a great idea. Especially the look Mac gave him.

As for macgyvering - do you know that the official Air Force manual (of planes or something?) even has the word inside? It says, when there are no spare parts for repairing something, you shall macgyver it. Maybe Sam could mention that as well!

All the voices are very nice. I always loved MacGyver/SG-1 fic.

Poor Daniel, to know he was right but can't tell the world about it.

I had to snigger at the line with the man driving away in the "broken" truck ;)

lolmac February 9 2011, 03:43:59 UTC

Thank you! I didn't know that about the Air Force manual -- I'd love to work that in, but I'd have to verify exactly which manual says it, and where.

I'm so glad you're enjoying it! I'm having a lovely time writing it.