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The Broken
Baron Remus J. Lupin, Lord Shrieking has lived a difficult life. He guards his secrets zealously, but when he stumbles upon an equally secretive violinist named Severus Snape, he begins to wonder if he's found someone to share his secrets with.
A novella set in 1876, England, in which mystery abounds, secrets are shocking, and two men ( Read more... )
I REALLY loved how well you wrote the chapter where Neville and Cedric were caught and how Hermione and Ginny dealt with Cedric's anger and the reality of their situation. It really felt powerful. I mean, even KNOWING what was supposed to happen, I felt myself cringing and aching for them. I flinched when Rede started breaking poor Snape's fingers, and the things Draco _didn't_ say!
Tonks as a klutzy 'soiled dove' was spot-on, and Dame McGonagall's letters were love, too. The songs Snape chose to play and when, and his reasons for...Pansy's talkative ways, and the attention to detail - like how it was considered inappropriate to mention legs or limbs!! The back plot in India wasn't something I'd considered, and while I was confused at first at there being Rede AND Riddle (Rede = Riddle in the plot I'd drafted), it worked out well and made perfect sense anyway. It was a great tie-in for the Potters and Malfoys and Blacks, and as an origin of Remus's lycanthropy, and - oh yes, Skeeter writing a woman's rag! LOL!
You did an AMAZING job on this, seriously, worth every penny and more in the name of justice! Even if you're not a Snupin fan yourself, you did a MORE than creditable job writing it :D
*goes to reread, link, and rec*
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I did have fun with the minor characters and backstory though. =) Trying to fit as many characters and "canon" bits in as possible was entertaining!
I also tried to make it as era-correct as possible. I'm afraid my Victorian knowledge is mostly situated in Western America, so some of the bits might not be completely correct (terms of address for example... it took a ton of research to even get close, and then I used first names a lot more often then a Victorian person would have, mostly because calling someone by their last name feels odd. =/)
I decided on the India backstory while researching the time period. I wanted to have Snape's parents die realistically, so I had his mum die when he was 5 from starvation from the Irish potato famine. There was a cholera epidemic in England three years later, so I killed his dad off then. XD That put him and Remus at 17 during the Indian Revolt--a little older than Remus should have been turned, but about the right age for Lily and James to have had Harry. I had to kill them off or write about them if I wrote Harry into it, so I killed them off in the revolt and gave Remus lycanthropy too. (I figured werewolves in wild India was a little more plausible than werewolves in cultured England since I went with mostly non-magic-ness).
And well, Rede was almost Riddle... the half-brothers thing was a bit of a stretch, but I figured that if Rede was a bastard, his father could be one too and abandon a pregnant Indian woman. XD
I dunno. I had a lot of fun working out all of the logistics and such and still fitting in what you wanted. I'm sorry I didn't manage to include many of your kinks... I'm just not comfortable with sex. =S I tried though!
*hugs* Again, I'm so glad you liked it! :)
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