Hmm. Well, personally, I think the ending is a tad bit abrupt--not the ending itself, per se, but the process of Scorpius finding out his memories seems a bit short, especially since his finding out he's lost his memories is a bit detailed in comparison. I feel like there can be a bit more fleshing out of Al and Scorpius's relationship between the time Scorpius first wakes up and when he finds out everything. But then, I'm one of those people who like to stretch scenes and stories and plots that possibly do not need any stretching, so that might just be me.
As for the tone of the story itself: the tone does change a lot from the beginning to the end of the fic. However, that's actually a good thing, IMO--it actually works well for this story, since Scorpius, like us, is discovering these things for himself; and I think you've laid out enough clues over the course of the entire fic so that when the end actually comes, the dark tone of it isn't entirely unexpected. I think you did a great job with a story in the short amount of time and word count (er, relatively short word count, anyway ;)), so don't worry about it! *hugs*
And I probably should have fleshed out their relationship as a happy couple more, but I didn't want to write them all happy and together and then have the ending. XD It would have made me even sadder after watching them do a bunch of lovey-dovey stuff.
As for the tone of the story itself: the tone does change a lot from the beginning to the end of the fic. However, that's actually a good thing, IMO--it actually works well for this story, since Scorpius, like us, is discovering these things for himself; and I think you've laid out enough clues over the course of the entire fic so that when the end actually comes, the dark tone of it isn't entirely unexpected. I think you did a great job with a story in the short amount of time and word count (er, relatively short word count, anyway ;)), so don't worry about it! *hugs*
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And I probably should have fleshed out their relationship as a happy couple more, but I didn't want to write them all happy and together and then have the ending. XD It would have made me even sadder after watching them do a bunch of lovey-dovey stuff.
I so adore you. ♥
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