Comments | betawho: Youth is Wasted on the Young p.4

betawho

Youth is Wasted on the Young p.4

Feb 23, 2011 16:41

"Janine, get the ATV ready, I'll be there in 15 minutes," the sheriff said into the microphone. He started the car. The Doctor laid a hand on the window.

"I'd like to come along," the Doctor said.

"No offense, Doctor, but this isn't work for civilians," the sheriff said.

"I'm a Special Investigator for the Unified Intelligence Taskforce," Doctor ( Read more... )

Comments 6

beachy_geek February 24 2011, 00:51:17 UTC

Things are really getting complicated--I can't imagine where everyone's disappeared to! Looking forward to the next update!

othermewriter February 25 2011, 02:58:13 UTC

I utterly adore this story! The UNIT credentials being legit was brilliant, I do so love when the pulls the unexpected out of the hat and leaves he traveling companions scraping their jaws off the floor/deck/ground. The "Render all Aid" was also a nice touch. I really can't wait to see where you go next with this story.

mornea April 3 2011, 18:12:54 UTC

"Rory leaned over and whispered. "Since when are you a member of UNIT?"" LOL! I really did laugh out loud sitting here at the computer when I read that. :) I agree with "other" above...I adore this story!

I like the little bits of banter between Amy, Rory, and the Doctor. The plot on it's own is intriguing, but the characters being perfectly in character (something not all fanfic achieves) is what makes me want to keep reading. After all, I "know" these people.

aileencross April 10 2011, 08:35:03 UTC

Dude, this is awesome!

You have some great world-building, here. I also really like the way you do your transitions from piece to piece.

Cool stuff. I had planned on commenting at the end, but I stopped here for the moment, mostly because I had to get up and do some stuff. I will definitely return, though. :D

hilandmum August 25 2011, 03:24:56 UTC

I started reading this on FF, but now I'm reading it here, and thoroughly enjoying it! You've created a wonderful world, worthy of the Doctor.

Mum

betawho August 25 2011, 05:36:17 UTC

Wonderful! Welcome! It's great to see people migrating here. I'm glad you're enjoying Feyanora and I hope it only gets more exciting as you go along. Let me know what you think. Cheers!