Perfect Numbers. Challenge 04: Prompt 1: Pink Ribbon

Oct 22, 2006 14:15

Title: Perfect Numbers. [Challenge 04: Prompt 1: Pink Ribbon]
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peur_03 October 22 2006, 16:15:03 UTC
I really like this, you had some cool metaphores and things in there, and your wording was absolutely beautiful.

but im sorry to say that i found the whole thing to do with the girl as confusing as algebra.

Despite that, it was still really well written and very very enjoyable.

I loved it!

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soulsdisband October 22 2006, 21:48:42 UTC
did you guess that I like maths a little too much?
And. yes, the girl. She is... an anomoly. I don't know how to explain without typing 3 pages.
I guess I like to write so at the end people are confused. I think most of life is that - confusing and impossible - but we all go around talking about life anyway.
I doubt this helped at all but, still, thankyou v. much for your comment.

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xshallowknifex October 22 2006, 19:19:50 UTC

We lay quietly. Sleeping. Breathing. Loving. All we needed was there. Your fingers traced slowly over the hair on my thighs, filling in time with movements so still they hardly happen at all. In these moments time stops for us, and as the word holds its breath we hold our chests and mouths to each other deeply inhaling the scent of history before we sigh and all the stirring of the world comes tumbling from our lips with an I don’t want this to end, and an I can’t stay here.

I've highlighted, copied and pasted a lot today. But this is really beautiful! Kudos.

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soulsdisband October 22 2006, 21:50:14 UTC
Thanks heaps!
And really, copying and pasting more is better in my eyes. (So, yay)

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amazing faceparadexo October 23 2006, 00:54:12 UTC
wow i really love this. it makes me pay attention and i love that kind of story

great job < 3

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Re: amazing soulsdisband October 23 2006, 03:05:26 UTC
thankyou v. much
<3
i love that kind of comment

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