Her glowing brown orbs glistened with tears...

Sep 15, 2010 02:13

I don't care how interesting your premise is, how much I like your title, or how on-point your characterisation is; if you describe a character's eyes as "orbs", I am frakking done. Out of there. Closing the tab, not looking back.

Ugh. Orbs.

bad fic, writing

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