Fic: Behavioural Modification - 2/5 (BBC Sherlock)

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Title: Behavioural Modification
Rating: R
Wordcount: 3.9k this part, 23.6k overall
Warnings: Extremely dysfunctional behaviour, sexual acts, swearing. Spoiler: ramifications of past emotional abuse.
Beta: vyctori
Disclaimer: Do not own.
Summary: Whatever it took, he was going to make this work.

Comments

[claralamora]

Sherlock loves John so much it hurts.... *Wibbles*

Your writing reminds me slightly of Wordstrings, if you've read her work.
Not as crazy, of course, but the same sort of dreamy atmosphere is there.
Well, not dreamy, that's not a good word for it. More like...ethereal.
I'm not making much sense, am I?
What I mean is that as this is written in Sherlock's point of view you get a feel, a bit of an inkling, into how Sherlock sees the world. How he feels the world, in a way. Not many people can burrow themselves into a character deep enough to achieve this. God knows I can't.

So, to make a long comment short, you write good. =P

PS: John means Sherlock when he says love life, right? RIGHT?!
Because if he's got a date again I'm going to bloody well kill him...

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I've read a little of Wordstrings' work, I think. Invisible Name? Her style has bite to it - I like it. I've been told I'm more atmospheric. Focused in the center but blurry around the edges, does that sound like what you mean?

One of my favorite parts of writing is the simple fact that there is no such thing as a truly reliable narrator. Normalcy's in the eye of the beholder, after all. You put their blinders on, take off your own as best as you can, and the entire world changes. Sherlock is a fantastic character for this, more than most.

Thanks for reading!

[darthhellokitty]

Oh, this gets better and better. Sherlock is trying really hard to get what he wants, and what he wants really isn't so terribly much, is it?

[bendingsignpost]

It isn't, really, but Sherlock Holmes is not a man to ask for cuddles. Thanks for reading!

[lindentreeisle]

I love watching these two be retarded with each other. You write it so well. I just want to scream, "Would you two please fucking talk to each other??"

Also this:
“Oh, I’ve got a whole list of the pretentious things you say,” John told him with relish.

“What’s the best one?”

“I don’t know,” John said, and butter wouldn’t melt in his mouth. “You haven’t finished talking yet.”

Made me laugh and laugh and laugh. :D Kudos!

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Thanks! They're such a joy to write. Who needs communication when Sherlock Holmes clearly knows what he's doing?

[vivid_winged]

Loved this.

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Thanks!

[imhit]

Oh, the tension! This is smouldering. Your Sherlock is brilliant, absolutely head over heels and perfectly believable. I love how he just keeps pushing.

“Oh, I’ve got a whole list of the pretentious things you say,” John told him with relish.

“What’s the best one?”

“I don’t know,” John said, and butter wouldn’t melt in his mouth. “You haven’t finished talking yet.”

Yeah, it's got to be said; I love how you write. I can't wait for the next part!

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He's not a man to give up. Or, as it has been and must always be noted, a man to speak with humility or tact. Thanks for reading!