Receiver, New Part...

[benchilada]

This is part three that I’ve posted, right? Not in order, of course. I think it’s becoming a play. I dunno. Two-person plays are hard to sell, I think. Advice over on dead-horse, please…anyway, a bit more…although this part feels rougher than the other two

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[spirit_of_zen]

It's good, but I deffinitely feel like I just picked up the TV remote and turned on some random channel, mid show, and started watching. Have to search for the other two installments and get the whole story.

[initiations]

i like it ben!!!!

[ba_shiea]

Hehehe. I still like it. I've seen short stories that are mostly dialogue. It would probably work better that way.