Comments | belantana: yuletide story the second

belantana

yuletide story the second

Jan 02, 2009 07:51

slow sky, still water.
for londonsophie, Lucas and Jo; set after episode 7.08 (read: spoilers for pretty much everything ever).

( at yuletide archive )

( here at my journal )

fic: spooks, omgwtfyuletide

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inflightdata January 2 2009, 08:16:30 UTC

So, so beautiful. This is great!

belantana January 2 2009, 09:36:30 UTC

Thank you! I'm very pleased that you enjoyed it.

lost_spook January 2 2009, 18:24:26 UTC

Again, excellent. (And who isn't willing to stay in denial about Zaf? We never saw him die. Oh, Spooks.) This was so very well done.

belantana January 3 2009, 00:02:31 UTC

We never saw him die - aarrghhh, I know. I think if we had I would be having nightmares myself. But I prefer to think of it as an opening, no matter how small. :) Thank you for your kind comments; they made my day!

jaybee65 January 6 2009, 06:21:50 UTC

I commented over at the Yuletide site already, but it's worth saying again: this is just lovely and *gorgeously* written. One of my fave Yuletide fics this year!

belantana January 6 2009, 08:05:07 UTC

Wow, thanks! That makes me all happy inside. I do hope canon continues to deliver so that I keep having things to write...

vixys January 11 2009, 14:51:15 UTC

Oh, that was heartbreaking, and so IC and well-written. Especially love for Lucas's ego-bruising and Jo treating herself like a child, and Jo's honesty about reading his file and Lucas finding that refreshing.

Stupid Spooks. Why does everyone have to die?

And of course Zaf's not dead. WE NEVER SAW HIM DIE, DAMNIT.

belantana January 11 2009, 23:40:40 UTC

Thank you! What lovely feedback and I do love it when people pick their favourite bits - always interesting. You picked one of my favourite bits too.

Why does everyone have to die? - because it's all about teh angst, yes. :)

beccatiendoh January 23 2009, 18:35:29 UTC

Ahh how have I not commented on this yet?! Sorry, sorry sorry.

The ‘long streak of approaching rain’ image for some reason really stayed with me. Lot of quiet, subtle touches in this one; like the smoke. I loved the bit about Jo looking childlike to Lucas; you’ve captured the way the show has let her feel young, damaged (but not broken) in a way that they haven’t let those like her before (Zoe, Sam etc).

Favourite line: Lucas looks, obligingly. The movement bites in his side. The expanse of sky makes him edgy; he suspects it's vertigo which reason won't let him indulge. He tries to smell the distant rain but gets only car exhaust and the brackish stench of the river..

And Know your limits…not Adam Carter. So true.

Gorgeous dynamic between the two, not one I’ve really thought about, but beautifully rendered here. And, oh, Zaf. There’s just not enough screen time to do what Jo must be feeling justice; thank god for fic like this.

Adored it. :D

belantana January 24 2009, 01:22:55 UTC

Thank you, thank you, thank you. You have the fine art of commenting down to perfection; you've pressed all my praise-buttons and made me grin like an idiot!

the way the show has let her feel young, damaged (but not broken) - I've recently been rewatching and rather cynically suspect that it's the way they neglect Jo screentime-wise which makes her so complex and interesting. But still, I'm eternally grateful they have left her in one piece. (So far.) (!!)

Top marks, too, for picking my favourite line :) :) :) One of the (oh-so-many) things they ignored about Lucas' release from prison was, I thought, the shock of being in big open spaces.

beccatiendoh January 24 2009, 12:13:32 UTC

It's quite hard trying to get balance right between expressing how much I liked a fic and sounding like a total fangirl!

I was not a Jo fan, I have to admit - I didn't see how any protege of Adam's would be successful - but fic like this is making me come around. Problem with the show is they have too many good characters, there's just not enough screentime what with the mammoth plots they insist on as well *g*. I think the show needs another episode like 2.5 - character driven as much as plot driven.

There's so much mileage in the prison thing it's unreal. I love how that line mentions his reason, his immense control, seperating his irrational reactions from rational.

belantana January 25 2009, 02:26:02 UTC

Oh yes please, another ep2.5 would be lovely. You're totally right about the character development being second to plot. I love a plotty show but there should be at least one episode every now and then which is character-driven.

It's quite hard trying to get balance right between expressing how much I liked a fic and sounding like a total fangirl! - Haha, really, I am ecstatic at either side of that balance. Also, I am currently having this very conversation with delgaserasca - whose Tom and Peter Salter fic you mentioned, I am still too mindful of gushing to actually comment on. *is ridiculous*

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