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[be_themoon]

Oh! I've been meaning to drop this meme on y'all for a while! Ganked from approximately half my writing f-list. O.o

Give me the title of a story I've never written, and feedback telling me what you liked best about it, and I will tell you any of: the first sentence, the last sentence, the thing that made me want to write it, the biggest problem I

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[be_themoon]

oh my god, I still can't believe I actually wrote that. it actually started out as simply a medium to tell about all the Archenland/Narnia conflict and the disappearing of the Pevensies and Peridan and Corin fighting it out for the throne (and Calormene hovering in the background!), and the utter chaos that fell on Narnia. but Aravis refused to simply be an observer and got involved and then Cor went all steely-eyed and then the entire country more or less went up in flames and I was like WHAT.

AHAHAHA. Another one where I don't even know what I was thinking. but Bella as an extremely creep vampire was kind of fun to write, especially as I could make it clear yes, she is creepy, and Edward thinks she's creepy too, but he needs someone to talk to. writing it in second-person was a really conscious decision too, to make you more firmly in his shoes. haha! yeah, Edward fainting because of the blood was irresistible.
First sentence: You see her the first time across the crowded hallway, her wide eyes clear in a perfect face, and then she's gone, leaving you to hope the aspirin you took for your headache this morning isn't causing hallucinations.
Last sentence: You think, maybe it is for the best, and cannot help but wonder if it was all nothing more than a strange dream, nightmarish and beautiful.

[animus_wyrmis]

No, it was awesome! It was so interesting watching you flesh out all the minor characters--Peridan and Corin especially. And your Cor was fantastic--I never expected him to be such a firm and strong ruler, but he was perfect. Watching him and Aravis read the Calormene Machiavelli was FANTASTIC. They're so pragmatic!

The second person worked really well. It was interesting too, that you didn't switch the families, so Edward was really more firmly alone because he had all these siblings sleeping together. Whereas you fleshed out vampire!Bella's relationship with vampire!Charlie. <33