Fic: The Toy Crown Incident (NC-17, 1/1, Ted/Barney, HIMYM)

[bananacosmic]

Title: The Toy Crown Incident
Author: bananacosmic

Author's Email: bananacosmicgirl@hotmail.com
Author's Home Page: CosmicUniverse.net

Fandom: How I met your mother
Word count: 6 000
Chapters: Oneshot
Rating: NC-17
Genre: Romance
Characters: Ted, Barney, Lily, Robin, Marshall
Pairings: Ted/Barney

Warnings: None
Spoilers: None

Disclaimer: This story is

Comments

[veritty]

Oh, it was amazing. <3 (Today's a really good day in fandom sense. Wonder why this is.)

Your writing is, once again, completely overwhelming and so very good.

What I love the most about this is Barney. How it is so obvious that he is very much in love but the word isn't ever pronounced (even in Ted's head). How he is silent and gives Ted an out. Yep, the angst whore in me loved him here. :))

I also adored the part where Lily reminded Ted not to hurt Barney. (I was struck with a flashback to Beyond the Illusion. :)) And how she was excited... Well, to wrap it up, you wrote awesomest Lily.

Oh, and the drunkenness! I don't really know but I could guess that it's not the easiest thing to write drunk people - or is it? Dunno. But I really liked how you did that; they were really believable. And 'Shatsky'! *g*

Now onto the quotes and some more ramble-ramble.

Why the hell were they naked together in bed?

Never mind, don’t answer that, he screamed at his brain.

LOVED THIS PART. xDDD

“I don’t base my choice of girlfriends on their footwear,” Ted said.

“Maybe you should,” Lily said.

Aw, Lil! <3

And how Barney doesn't freak out at all (and the reader immediately starts to suspect that he is in fact more than okay with what happened). He wants to sleep more. Sweet. :D

“There’s a toy crown on my nightstand,” Ted said, hoping to sound as truthful as possible. It was the truth, it just wasn’t the whole truth.

Very Ted.

Barney’s face became a stony mask. “I’m sorry I’m so disgusting.”

This small line is love. And this entire moment is love, too.
God, I just adore silent suffering. And it's not very easy to write this - I mean, on some show the actors can play this and that, but in written form... And that's why I loved it even more. <3

Great fic.

PS. there's one typo that caught my eye - should I point it out or not? :)

PPS. And now I'm gonna go and finally review on Beyond the Illusion. Gah. I'm really ashamed, but it deserves such an epic review - and I haven't gathered the strength to start... Excuses, excuses.
(still haven't gotten to Becoming, but I so look forward to it. :D)

[veritty]

HTML fail. Or rather my fail at HTML. Or rather my habit of writing first the ending, then something in the middle, then the bit at the beginning, then more in the middle, then the very beginning... Yeah.

[bananacosmic]

*g* No worries. And do point out the typo. I've gone over it, but I tend to miss stuff.

Anyway, I'm very happy you liked it! :D I haven't written Ted/Barney before but this wrote itself. I also love silent, suffering Barney, so I'm glad that came across.

I'll appreciate a review for Beyond the Illusion, if you feel like it, of course - otherwise I'll be happy just knowing you've read it and enjoyed it. And I hope you enjoy Becoming once you have time to read it.

You wrote such a long and nice review and I don't know how to respond with equal length, but your comment put a huge smile on my face :D Thank you!

[veritty]

Ah, it's a small thing.

Ted wondered if is should feel weird to be cuddling with Barney
'it'?

Also, didn't mention this the first time, but GUH LOVE.

Ted hated only a little how un-Barney Barney was being. All quiet, with soft blue eyes gazing at Ted with-

Oh, Ted was so not going there. He saw nothing in Barney’s eyes. Nothing. Nothing, nothing, nothing!

Yeah, the thing is that I do feel like it. :D

You don't have to! You're the author. I'm glad that it did. :)

[bananacosmic]

Thank you, fixed :)

Also, re: writing drunk people. I haven't ever actually been drunk, but I've been around enough people who have, so I guess it was mostly based on that. And the way they've acted on the show ^^ I'm glad it came across as true to how drunk people act.

*g* Then by all means, do comment ;)