How the heck did I actually think it was okay to SUBMIT this!?
It was about an hour later, when suddenly, I heard a scrabbling near the entrance to the alley.
gyaaaaaarf!
The edited version:
They'd been hunkering behind their meager cover for an hour when Shannon heard something scrabbling near the entrance to the alley.
Which still needs work, I'm the first one to admit, but at least it has some more content in it.
gyaaaaaarf!
The edited version:
They'd been hunkering behind their meager cover for an hour when Shannon heard something scrabbling near the entrance to the alley.
Which still needs work, I'm the first one to admit, but at least it has some more content in it.