Chapter four: At the barricades
Okay, so my old plot wasn't working for me. There's no way I could make it to 50,000 words if I stuck to it.
Which means I need to take things off in another direction.
And somehow still have it add up to the situation Dara is in in the prologue.
This is the kind of challenge that makes NaNo so interesting. :D
( Witch Stone, chapter four )
Which means I need to take things off in another direction.
And somehow still have it add up to the situation Dara is in in the prologue.
This is the kind of challenge that makes NaNo so interesting. :D
( Witch Stone, chapter four )
Some lines that genuinely produced the tingle-down-the-spine reaction:
"Did you foresee that?" she growled to Jalon, straining to be heard over the din.
"Don't we all foresee it?" Jalon said hoarsely. "Every day of our lives, don't we wake up wondering if it will happen today?"
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Then, across at least fifty meters of wall, the gargoyles came to life as one.
Lizards and birds, monkeys and men, medusas and baroque horrors that looked like nothing natural - suddenly, they were no longer statues, but creatures of living stone.
Loved those excerpts.
I also continue my love of Rinabaar. He's great. He's a little bit self-conscious (which I like seeing in male characters, it's a good change from the EPIC MASCULINE BRAVADO), but not even in an over-the-top way. He's respectful of Dara. He is a bit jealous of Jalon but doesn't automatically hate him because of it (what? Maturity, even while jealous? Shocking). And manages to be totally hilarious while still being jealous and mature.
Rinabaar could not help but notice, did not look uncultured or brutish - his features were very elegant, in fact, and while his clothes were torn, they only gave him a look of a gentleman stoically enduring hardships with dignity.
I laughed out loud.
I also liked Jalon's description of how he sees the future - with the song-analogy.
Oh, and how Dara is like "GOD I AM RIGHT WHY DOES NO ONE LISTEN" and Rinabaar is like "Eh-heh, sorry, but, demon army".
So, in sum, liked lots of things a lot. ;)
(I want you to know I printed this chapter and the second half of the last chapter out and took it to the doctor's with me. That is how much I wanted to keep reading.)
(Also, sorry I didn't review the last chapter on it's own, but it did read it! :) )
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Hee! Rinabaar is a lot of fun to write. He's so stoical and unruffled. :D
See here for the guy that Rinabaar is at least trying to be. ;)
He is a bit jealous of Jalon but doesn't automatically hate him because of it (what? Maturity, even while jealous? Shocking).
Petty resentment of a victorious rival would be most unbecoming of a gentleman. 8)
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