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[baehj2915]

i posted a draft of the teaser part of the script of the first episode of the show i hope to make called Murder, WI at gumball_prose in case any one is interested. it has a large cast of characters, but only a few start out the town. give me feedback on how to make it more compelling with the dialog, because i'm mainly seeing it visually right now.

here it is

~love from WI
JLB