I'm terrible at this.....

Nov 14, 2009 04:19

I've decided to take the leap and spork one of my own stories, a CSI: Miami fic. Feel free to roast it with me - because it's god-awful.....
You can find it here: www.fanfiction.net/s/3349017/1/The_Secrets_We_Keep

Sporkage is in bold.

Summary: Ryan falls for the new CSI, but will something end this relationship before it gets off the ground? Ryan/OC
Will something end it before it gets off the ground? Yep - Something relating to Ryan being a clutz.

When my father died, he had made it know that his last wish was for his two daughters to be in Miami, together, as a family.
I don't know about any of you, but my last wish would be to live......

A few seconds later, we turn into what is the ballistics lab.
People turning into ballistics labs?!? Maybe this is a case for CSI....

The case we were working on with the dead girl had hit a dead end;
Bad puns like this make me want to punch myself in the head. Anybody want to take a swing?

While they all got ready to go, I was having the worst headache of my life.
Somebody get her some tylenol!!

Before Alexx and Ryan can go on, Eric practically bursts through the morgue swinging doors.
When I read this sentence now, it makes it seem like Eric is running around, carrying a set of doors.

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