To be fair I'm not certain I've seen a sea nymph Sue before...
It's a Love Story by Captain Akeimi
The summary contains the lines: "This is a Yugioh fic taking place in Egypt, between my sea nymph Akeimi and Atemu. Chapter 9 is a bit graphic just for a warning, and NO bashing of my character."
I pretty much skipped straight to chapter 9 of course like the masochist that I am (although I feel compelled to point out that asking people not to bash your horrible horrible OC just makes them feel more inclined to do it, go figure!).
There are more than 250 daughters of Nereus, the Mediterranean Sea. They are known as the sea nymphs both beautiful and mysterious. This is the story about one of them.
"Hmm... this is very warm water," Akeimi said.
What a promising start! I can tell this is going to be a thoroughly riveting fic and... no I'm sorry I can't lie to myself anymore. It's over.
Blah blah blah skip eight chapters stuff happens they end up in a field or something and DINGDINGDING we come to "the lemon". It is possibly one of the most boring, uninspiring sex/makeout/whathaveyou scenes I have ever read.
Akeimi opened her eyes, and looked into Atemu's crimson, now violet, orbs,
Wait, magical colour-changing eyes orbs? The Pharaoh's the Sue now?
"Are you doing all right?" he asked, checking up on her, he wanted to know if anything he was doing was causing her any discomfort.
What that's not conceivable dialogue for the given situation argrashnash I hate everything. Oh blah this is just so unsexy .___.
Atemu kissed her neck, and caressed her hips with his wandering hands, tis left his weight resting on Akeimi.
Apparently it's difficult to type with one hand in your pants.
As much as his body wanted to go ahead and go for it, his heart told him to restrain himself, until she was almost begging for it.
This is supposed to show how "gentle" Atemu's being but it's had the effect, instead, of making him sound like a bit of a cold-hearted bastard who is possibly into S&M. "your anguish sustains me!"
It never quite reaches the much-coveted "lemon" status because it tapers mercifully off thusly...
Atemu kissed and carressed her with his lips. The young woman moaned. Then.....
~What are you insane? They want some privacy!~
I kinda want a fandom purge, but I'm not going to get that. What makes them so special?!
The summary contains the lines: "This is a Yugioh fic taking place in Egypt, between my sea nymph Akeimi and Atemu. Chapter 9 is a bit graphic just for a warning, and NO bashing of my character."
I pretty much skipped straight to chapter 9 of course like the masochist that I am (although I feel compelled to point out that asking people not to bash your horrible horrible OC just makes them feel more inclined to do it, go figure!).
There are more than 250 daughters of Nereus, the Mediterranean Sea. They are known as the sea nymphs both beautiful and mysterious. This is the story about one of them.
"Hmm... this is very warm water," Akeimi said.
What a promising start! I can tell this is going to be a thoroughly riveting fic and... no I'm sorry I can't lie to myself anymore. It's over.
Blah blah blah skip eight chapters stuff happens they end up in a field or something and DINGDINGDING we come to "the lemon". It is possibly one of the most boring, uninspiring sex/makeout/whathaveyou scenes I have ever read.
Akeimi opened her eyes, and looked into Atemu's crimson, now violet, orbs,
Wait, magical colour-changing eyes orbs? The Pharaoh's the Sue now?
"Are you doing all right?" he asked, checking up on her, he wanted to know if anything he was doing was causing her any discomfort.
What that's not conceivable dialogue for the given situation argrashnash I hate everything. Oh blah this is just so unsexy .___.
Atemu kissed her neck, and caressed her hips with his wandering hands, tis left his weight resting on Akeimi.
Apparently it's difficult to type with one hand in your pants.
As much as his body wanted to go ahead and go for it, his heart told him to restrain himself, until she was almost begging for it.
This is supposed to show how "gentle" Atemu's being but it's had the effect, instead, of making him sound like a bit of a cold-hearted bastard who is possibly into S&M. "your anguish sustains me!"
It never quite reaches the much-coveted "lemon" status because it tapers mercifully off thusly...
Atemu kissed and carressed her with his lips. The young woman moaned. Then.....
~What are you insane? They want some privacy!~
I kinda want a fandom purge, but I'm not going to get that. What makes them so special?!