Sporking another one of my bad!fics
I'm so bored I decided to spork one of my own bad!fics. Sporking is in bold. It's a Gilmore Girls one-shot that I wrote back in May. Link: www.fanfiction.net/s/4237281/1/The_Gilmore_Danes_Family
Rory Gilmore was blown away by her new baby sisters. She had never seen babies so cute, not even Lane’s twins or Sookie’s three kids. -Is it me or are those sentences just completely awkward?
“I want to name her Rhiannon,” Lorelai cried in her eighth month of pregnancy.
“I’m not naming my daughter after a Fleetwood Mac song,” Luke told his wife. Lorelai had refused to speak to her husband for several hours afterwards. -I can see Lorelai naming one of her kids after a song, but I can't picture her not talking to Luke because she didn't like what he said. What was I thinking? Stupid May me.
“What about Caroline,” Rory had asked three days earlier. -Where's my question mark? Why did I do that so much in my early days of writing? Why do I keep asking questions?
“I love the name too, Luke said. What are we going to do about a middle name?” - Bad grammar alert! Luke said is now included in the dialogue.
“Those are beautiful names,” Rory told her mother and stepmother. -When did Luke turn into a girl? Oh no! Lorelai got pregnant by another woman who the same name as Luke Danes!
Epilogue:
Lorelai, Gillian, and Annabelle left the hospital two days later. Gillian and Annabelle had drastically different personalities, but nobody cared. -How does Gillian and Annabelle having drastically different personalities and no one caring even relevant to this fic?
Fourteen months after Gillian and Annabelle’s birth, Lorelai was back in the delivery room. She gave birth to another daughter that was named Rhiannon Aurora Gilmore-Danes. Rory, April, Gillian, and Annabelle adored their little sister.
Sixteen months later, Lorelai was once again back in the delivery room. She and Luke had another daughter that was named Isabella Marie Gilmore-Danes. Isabella was adored by her five older sisters.
Eleven months later, the Gilmore-Danes were joined by Caroline Amelia Gilmore-Danes. After several pregnancies, Lorelai had finally relented on the name.
Thirteen months later, the Gilmore-Danes were joined by another sister. Luke and Lorelai named their final daughter Keely Lorelai Gilmore-Danes. Keely was the couple’s final child, because Lorelai sent Luke in for a vasectomy. “We’re too fertile,” Lorelai had complained to Sookie. The couple never got a son, but they were happy with eight daughters. -Apparantly, I liked the fact that Lorelai was perpetually pregnant. She kept popping out daughters. I think Lorelai would have sent Luke in for a vasectomy way before she had so many babies. Or Luke would have willingly gone in for a vasectomy. One reviewer even pointed out that they became like Brangelina. To me, they seem worse than them.
Mods, may I please have a Gilmore Girls tag? Thanks in advance.