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http://loggyj.deviantart.com/art/Nala-s-Weight-Gain-Part-1-73755288
I love a good weight gain story, I won't lie. But when I came across this... ew. Just ew. First of all, Lion King as a WG? Alright, this is probably a parody, I'll bite... Sad thing is, the fic seems to be something that the author is genuinely proud of. The grammer in this kills me on the inside, as I'm sure those of you brave enough to look will agree with me. Well, on with the fun...
So, the lions soon become the heaviest species in the kingdom (with the lightest one being a two-ton)
Like I said, I like weight gain... but keep it somewhat realistic, huh?
Simba, might’ve became fat like the rest of the pride, he would have loved it, ever since the weight gains began, being so fat he can’t move to do anything but eat and become fatter has been his wildest dream.
This sentance disgusts and enrages me. Simba is nothing like this! (Yes, I realize the author says OOC, but still). Also, the grammer, ugh.
those who managed not to get eaten later in this story and are her closest friends have figured out the she gains 20 lbs a second from that moment onward (that’s 1200 lbs a minute, 72000 lbs an hour and 1,728,000 lbs a day)...
I don't know about you guys, but I hate it when an author has to come up with an excuse, like this, to give actual numbers on something. If there are actual numbers and actual math involved, just say so! This is just a huge run on sentance (it continues...). Also... once again, keep it *somewhat* realistic. I've never seen so much fat in a WG, and that's saying a lot!
First post here... those brave enough to read, the link is up at the top. Be afraid...