Title: Games Of Love
Author: Cassie Morgan (falconkenobi@aol.com)
Author Web Page:
http://www.aemslash.co.uk Obsess, Much?
Fandom: RPS - Good Charlotte/Mest
Categories: Tony Lovato/Joel Madden, PWP, D/s
Rating: NC-17
Thanks to: You, for reading this.
xfellx, for requesting in the fic meme. Chel, as
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*dies happy*.
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ksjhflkjfhlkf.
Christ, I wish I found that in MY room after a bad day.
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and hell, I wouldn't mind find Joel naked and masturbating in my ANY day ;)
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One thing I'd just like to say.. the dialogue. The way Tony spoke.. people don't actually speak like that, you know? Maybe try to figure out a way to make it more believeable.
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What specifically did you find un-natural about the dialogue?
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A character like Tony (who is, let's face it, pretty fucking dumb) speaks pretty colloquially, so there are a few phrases in there that, I don't know, I just can't see him using. "First Matt’s full of 'flu", I think that's a british thing. But no matter.
"with one hand pillowing your head," is used a couple of times and I really can't see him saying anything other than "holding up your head" or something along those lines. I think basically you need to dumb down the language, because Tony's not as smart as you, lol.
Also, "Ice and fire running through your veins."
Feel free to disagree, though. Hope that helped some.
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I love Joel/Tony slash almost as much as twincest....oi was that hot and incredible. Loved it!
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