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May 26, 2009 07:16

Oh gracious, I turn a blind eye for just a sexond and the second post fills up! Darlings, sweetpeas, do please forgive my tardiness. I bring you now our third installment of the fantasticousity, and would indeed love to, ah, beg your pardon in being so late about it.

SHIN MEGAMI TENSEI: PERSONA 4 KINK MEME
PART THREE

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Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 02:27:37 UTC
Two days after that, Rise's standing in the doorway of Marukyu Tofu, marveling at Naoto Shirogane's amazing ability to show up when she's wearing a shop apron and hat. It's not her most flattering look.

Naoto nods, tipping down his cap. "Good afternoon, Kujikawa-san. Kanji Tatsumi said you wished to speak with me."

"You were hanging out with him again?" Rise asks - snaps, really - before she can catch herself. Don't introduce yourself first, Rise, that'd be too normal.

"No. Do you have information regarding the case?"

For all her supposed cleverness in getting Kanji to send Naoto here, Rise didn't actually plan this conversation. She doesn't even know why she wanted to see him again, especially when he was mean last time and she doesn't have anything worth saying.

"...N-no, no I don't. Sorry," she manages - and waits for Naoto to turn around and leave.

But he doesn't. Instead, he just looks at her, and it's a long time before he speaks. "Is something else wrong?"

He doesn't even remember. Probably doesn't think he did anything bad. And even if he didn't, really, even if most of this is just her feeling like an idiot, Rise's still pissed. "You are. You were such a jerk, Naoto Shirogane! And see, I had to find out your name from the television, you didn't even tell me!"

Naoto doesn't blink. "It wasn't relevant at the time."

"Not relevant? Of course it was, I-I thought, maybe..." Rise gives up, throws up her hands. "Oh, like it even matters!"

"What doesn't?"

"Nothing. Nothing." Rise tips up her chin. "Why were you on television anyway, Mr. Big Shot?"

"Not by choice. I am reasonably well-known and the police requested I appeal for information from the public." Naoto's shoulders stiffen, and for the first time since Rise met him, he looks uncomfortable. "It was not an enjoyable experience."

How something looks isn't always how it really is; Rise should've remembered that. For a moment, she feels just a little guilty. "It's not that bad. You get used to it."

"I hope I don't need to," Naoto says, then shakes his head. "I was unaware I'd upset you, Kujikawa-san. I apologize."

It might be monotone, it might lack any facial expression to match - but somehow, Rise's certain he means it. It takes a monumental effort to ignore the odd, warm feeling curling up in her stomach and actually answer. "W-well, that, that's fine. Just don't be like that again!"

"I'll attempt to improve." Naoto looks at her from under his cap, eyes cool but... different, maybe. "Was that all you required?"

"Yeah. Yeah, it was." Arms folded, Rise glares down at him from the doorstep - he's even shorter than she thought - and tries to sound confident. "So I guess you can go, if you want. But, but you have to stop by here again, okay?"

For all her skill as an actress, Rise doesn't always think things through before speaking. She's grateful when Naoto nods, says goodbye and walks away - all without asking her exactly why she wants him to come back.

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Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 13:08:27 UTC
Coming from Marukyu Revue, I never notice the title grammar! XD

Nice~ I'll mark this as the definitive starting point in their future relationship! It makes the fangirl in me squeal with joy!!!

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Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 26 2009, 20:13:20 UTC
I feel better, maybe my error went unnoticed ;D Thanks!

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Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 16:00:11 UTC
This is really sweet~ looking forward to more!

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Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 26 2009, 20:14:02 UTC
Thanks! Trying to make regular updates :)

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Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 22:48:51 UTC
loved this anon! keep it up! :D

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Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 26 2009, 20:14:15 UTC
Thank you! :)

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Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 23:01:40 UTC
loved this anon! keep it up! :D

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OP anonymous August 26 2009, 06:20:55 UTC
*A* I am truly loving this so far. You got Naoto's characterization EXACTLY how I wanted it (and Rise's too, but I'm hugely picky about Naoto!) and just hdkskdhfjfk have my firstborn plz?

And especially since he doesn't seem interested in Risette, she thinks - then immediately winces. Modest as ever, Rise.
Another random line I really liked. I just thought it showed a really human/realistic kind of thought process...that kind of almost-conceit I think most have in the back of their head sometimes, and then the instant revision. Idek I just love your writing 8)

I'm always so sad when the chapters are over ;A; but it gives me something to look forward to! This is really A+, anon, I couldn't have dreamed of anything better :>

ps. captcha sez, 28% deadpan. ffff if we're talking about Naoto, I think it's a lot more than that 8|

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Re: OP anonymous August 26 2009, 20:19:23 UTC
Hey OP! I am very, very glad you like it so far :) And that you like Naoto's characterization, especially since she's being portrayed from Rise's viewpoint.

Trying to keep Rise sympathetic, too - she tends to get a hard time from some fans, but she's actually a really interesting character. (And this is never-met-Shadow Rise, as well, quite a few insecurities going on.)

Thanks so much for the comments, too, I will try to keep the standard up (and yeah, captcha is WAY off ;))

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