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[sockety]

Sue's slow and rich Southern Drawl rolled from smiling lips like molasses in October

molasses- [noun]
thick dark syrup produced by boiling down juice from sugar cane; especially during sugar refining

Now the mental picture of someone randomly drooling 'dark, thick syrup', like Jennifer in 'Jennifer's body' is stuck in my mind.

[edited to fix some

Comments

[corrupted_wolf]

Actually, of all the things in that sentence that need fixing, "molasses" is probably the last thing I'd pick to fix. It's purple, but I've seen it used in that context to describe an accent that is slow, thick, and sweet. Sue must be a fan of Civil War romances.

The rest of that sentence needs to be slapped with a high school English book a few times, though.

[sockety]

I don't mind someone saying a voice is 'slow, thick and sweet' but the 'rolled out of her mouth like molasses' was what got me. Maybe it's just a pet peeve.

[corrupted_wolf]

Oh, I agree. Sue isn't the only offender, though. I see it more than I'd like to describe a Southern accent. Combined with the rest of that sentence, it's like the words are screaming "HEEEEELP MEEEE!" like that guy in The Fly.

[wallystorm]

Yeah. Liquid rolling? Flowing maybe. Or not, as the case may be with molasses in winter.

[turtleyurtle1]

I think it would be fixed (that portion, anyways) if it was more like "her accent was like molasses, slow, thick, and sweet." It'd still be over the top a little but better sounding.