Bad Description Time!
Game: Old WoD Changeling: the Dreaming
Character Type: Pooka
Description: (Character) stands at an unassuming five-three. Wrapped in a silk packaging of caramel flesh which held a nachre sheen of prismatic color, her fram laced with Athena-inspired curves. Endless eyes of lapis peek from thick, inky 'lashes. A button nose poises above a cupid's bow mouth which boasted with wicked, smarmy grins. Spun-midnight strands held in loose, elegantly disarrayed curls. [Mein] A technicolor dream, rather ethereal in it's vivid nature. Brillian plumes threaten to spring into display trailing from her rear -- wrapped in a fine vibrantly hued Sari. Her eyes like black, swirling inkwellls with little bursts of color. A sweet smile and a honeyed, Southern drawl go a long way, hmm?
For those unfamiliar with the game "mein" means she's describing what the fae can see as opposed to what Average Joe can.
Now for the commentary.
What in blazing fuck?! "Athena-inspired curves"?! Where the hell do you think you're going with this? You don't invoke Athena for BEAUTY you invoke Aphrodite you raging purple-prosing twit. Everything about this character screams "great, an IC filled with English raping writing". Good for you. Good for you.
And by the way I hope her skeleton, organs and other meaty bits are encased in SKIN or this is all going to get pretty damned messy.
Character Type: Pooka
Description: (Character) stands at an unassuming five-three. Wrapped in a silk packaging of caramel flesh which held a nachre sheen of prismatic color, her fram laced with Athena-inspired curves. Endless eyes of lapis peek from thick, inky 'lashes. A button nose poises above a cupid's bow mouth which boasted with wicked, smarmy grins. Spun-midnight strands held in loose, elegantly disarrayed curls. [Mein] A technicolor dream, rather ethereal in it's vivid nature. Brillian plumes threaten to spring into display trailing from her rear -- wrapped in a fine vibrantly hued Sari. Her eyes like black, swirling inkwellls with little bursts of color. A sweet smile and a honeyed, Southern drawl go a long way, hmm?
For those unfamiliar with the game "mein" means she's describing what the fae can see as opposed to what Average Joe can.
Now for the commentary.
What in blazing fuck?! "Athena-inspired curves"?! Where the hell do you think you're going with this? You don't invoke Athena for BEAUTY you invoke Aphrodite you raging purple-prosing twit. Everything about this character screams "great, an IC filled with English raping writing". Good for you. Good for you.
And by the way I hope her skeleton, organs and other meaty bits are encased in SKIN or this is all going to get pretty damned messy.