Miss Snark
(Miss Snark is a literary agent who offered to critique the first pages and cover letters of some of her readers' work.)
Trina kept to a quick, purposeful stride as she moved away from the house she'd hit. Anyone watching would think her an apprentice sent on some important task.
The first stentence pulls me in.
The second sentence makes me want to hit you with a hammer.
"A Life Unraveled" is a 68,600 word suspense novel that would appeal to fans of J.D. Robb and James Patterson.
you might want to say "highly commercial fiction" rather than James Patterson. He sells a lot but he writes like shit.
(So true. I plan to keep James Patterson books on hand in November, so their horrid plotless published messes will warm my heart during the bleakest NaNo doldrums.)
Trina kept to a quick, purposeful stride as she moved away from the house she'd hit. Anyone watching would think her an apprentice sent on some important task.
The first stentence pulls me in.
The second sentence makes me want to hit you with a hammer.
"A Life Unraveled" is a 68,600 word suspense novel that would appeal to fans of J.D. Robb and James Patterson.
you might want to say "highly commercial fiction" rather than James Patterson. He sells a lot but he writes like shit.
(So true. I plan to keep James Patterson books on hand in November, so their horrid plotless published messes will warm my heart during the bleakest NaNo doldrums.)