Chlollie Fanfic: Slingshot, Chapter 2

[babydee1]

I have been reliably informed that what I call a catapult, y'all call a slingshot.  So I've renamed the title, and have edited chapter one to reflect that as well.

Bah.  maybe I'll just get a beta next time!

Here's more.  Enjoy!  Awesome banner by geek_or_unique .  Thanks, babes!

Comments

[babydee1]

"Okay. You just nail the descriptiveness here. Just from this short paragraph I can just picture the action. "By this time the man had reached the red car and was fumbling in his pocket. Oliver distinctly heard the jangle of car keys, and knew he was running out of time. He narrowed his eyes and focused on the target, pulling the sling as taut as it would go. Then he released it and sent the stone whistling through the air." It just makes me think of some of the scenes with GA pulling the bowstring back and sighting in on a target."

*grins* Well spotted, babes. That was my template for the scene! :-D

"It's just destiny to see him instinctively react to help. It really builds a back-story to how he winds up becoming the GA. I don't think they explored that enough."

They certainly didn't. There was nothing in Reunion that hinted at his future destiny. I guess if your name isn't Clark Kent or Lois Lane on this show, they don't really bother with your onscreen development. Ah, well. Their loss!

"And, I love your young Chloe too. She so precocious and a fighter already. I found her actions completely in character for how I'd picture her, especially having that sense of humor."

It's a joy to write such a young Chloe, because she's completely pre-censored! Reminds me of her early reporter days. *sniff*

So glad you're reviewing this, hun! :-)