Drabbles: Useless as Next Morning's Sun (YnM)

[b_hallward]

Title: Useless as Next Morning's Sun
Author: Dorian Gray
Fandom: Yami no Matsuei
Rating: PG-13
Challenge: "Tsuzuki: love and desire, the difference and how it matters"
AN: For p_zeitgeist. Two 100-word drabbles. Series Index here.

Useless as Next Morning's SunIt uncoils like a dream: everything sharper, fluid. He can't speak, tongue sliced in two, so he

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[p_zeitgeist]

I should probably wait to comment until I can say something more coherent than "eeeee!!" But, I'm not going to.

God, these are good. And the two pieces work together so perfectly. And if you think now that I'm going to be sorry at having sold you Muraki/Tsuzuki, you are so wrong. Even if I do now feel curiously redundant. As in, Hey, no fair doing that better than I do.

[b_hallward]

I'm so glad you like them. What can I say, you're a dangerously persuasive woman. And you always come up with such interesting prompts and yet I have a bad habit of flaking on you -- embarrassingly enough there's a thirty-year-old Hisoka drabble you requested ages ago I'm still thinking about -- but this time I was determined not to give up till I had something.

But redundant? Hardly. I'll run my Tsuzuki up against anyone's, but when it comes to both Muraki and Hisoka, you have me beat all hollow. Really, I have massive envy. I want to sneak into you mind in the middle of the night and steal them from you.

[p_zeitgeist]

I have a bad habit of flaking on you

I can't think of it as "flaking." I can only write to order by luck and accident -- one reason I'm so afraid of challenge comms that require a genuine committment -- and I think of these prompts more as offerings than as requests. If one of them sparks something, and is fun and useful, that's of the good, and I feel all happy with audience participation. But some won't, or will inspire something that's more trouble than it's worth, and the requestee should feel free to let those go. Or so I believe, at least.

So don't be embarrassed. Or I'll have to be embarrassed in return, and that will be circular and pointless and time-wasting.

I want to sneak into you mind in the middle of the night and steal them from you.

I'm flattered. But I can't think that there's any need to sneak in and steal them: they'll visit. Muraki in particular is like Edward Gorey's Doubtful Guest: "It came seventeen years ago, and to this day/It has shown no intention of going away."

Just ask Oriya.

[b_hallward]

Well, trust me to take one of the more neurotic viewpoints possible on the process. I like your way of thinking much better. License to flake ^^

I think I wrote something about this in my Amaranths commentary, but as that will probably never be finished and posted, I'll say it here: I often feel my Hisoka isn't edgy enough -- he's too kind, too soft, with a streak of something that's almost gentleness -- which, yeah, is totally my characterization MO (and I'm sure it doesn't help I saw the anime before I read the manga). But that's the Hisoka I can write; your Hisoka is a hell of a lot closer to the one I wish I could write. I still remember reading Portrait of an Empath and saying to myself, yeah, now this is Hisoka. It was a strangely revelatory experience

[wordsofastory]

Oh, wow. These are so good, and I love the way they work together, the contrasts between them. Really, really excellent.

[b_hallward]

#^^# Thanks -- I hoped they would play off each other nicely.

[ranalore]

These are fantastic.

[b_hallward]

Thank you *g*

[shes_unreal]

Squee! Faaaaaaaaabulous!

[b_hallward]

Thank you!

[parallactic]

Here via wordsofastory's rec.

I like the contrast between Tsuzuki/Muraki, and Tsuzuki/Hisoka. I also liked the romantic imagery you used to describe Tsuzuki's pain in the first drabble, and the resigned feeling in the second one.

[b_hallward]

Thank you! This was my first attempt at Tsuzuki/Muraki -- I'm glad you liked it.