Crossroads - A Blue Gravel Path (12/13)

[azriona]

Title: A Blue Gravel Path
Characters: The Doctor, Rose Tyler, among others
Warnings: PG. Oh, and it’s baby!fic.
Spoilers: For the sake of this story, S4 never happens.
Beta: runriggers

Part of the Crossroads series
A now AU and non-S4 compliant story. Ah well.
Part One: Reflections
Part Two: One Day
Part Three: Choices and ChancesPart Four: A Blue Gravel

Comments

[azriona]

Hee, so much to comment on here...

Is it bad of me that I started trying to think of five million complicated plot related reasons why Nina might suddenly be eating raspberries?

Nope. Just one very simple reason: she, like Dex, knows the tables have turned now.

as well as what he's been learning off the guards

There was, in the original version of this chapter, a whole thing where the guards are actually teaching him these things, and lots more, told from their POV. But it didn't fit with the final version of the chapter, which is told entirely from Rose's POV, and I decided in the end not to break that. Which is too bad, because the guards totally love Dex.

The quote from the book on Torchwood is very interesting and sweet at the same time.

*grin* And familiar, I should hope; you read its twin not too long ago.

I liked Rose's repeated comment that she's the strange woman in the market place, as well as Jackie refuting that.

I almost forgot to put it in, actually - I never liked that Jackie worried over this. All children change, no matter what. There would always be a time when Jackie would look at Rose and realize that Rose had grown up. I think that will be true, even with Rose in the same universe, and I think Jackie's being somewhat ridiculous not to realize that. Which is why I have her realize it here - because even when Rose does grow up, there will never be a time in which Jackie does not recognize her, and I think Jackie realizes that, after the years apart.

Dex's interaction with Carissa is quite interesting and sweet at the same time (but then, I just like Dex).

He's really quite a likeable kid. I like his interaction with Carissa, too. I wish I could have expanded it a little, but I'd already set up (and still feel it's right) that she couldn't stay very long in their world.

Thank you for the long, lovely review! My favorite - I'll be sorry not to see them from you when I'm done!

[izzy_g]

There was, in the original version of this chapter, a whole thing where the guards are actually teaching him these things, and lots more, told from their POV. But it didn't fit with the final version of the chapter, which is told entirely from Rose's POV, and I decided in the end not to break that. Which is too bad, because the guards totally love Dex.

Side story?

[azriona]

Maybe. It'd be a awfully short side story, and I sort of feel like it was already told, anyway. There's other things I gloss over I think I'd rather tell instead! :)