Comments | aznphoenixx: [Complete] Is this it?

aznphoenixx

[Complete] Is this it?

Nov 16, 2010 13:29

Fandom: Final Fantasy XIII
Pairing: Lightning/Serah, Farroncest
Theme set: Epsilon
Title: Is this it?
Rating: M for safety
Warning[s]: SISTERLY INCEST, possible ending spoilers
Notes: Apologies in advance for wonky sentence structures. I tried my best to beta myself. For 1sentence

( And the superstars sucked into the supermassive... )

*fandom: ffxiii, fanfic, [character: lightning], [character: serah], 1sentence, {pairing: farroncest}, !public

Comments 4

woodwind November 16 2010, 21:04:22 UTC

Yay! I have been looking forward to this. :)

You did a really great job, I think there were a few typos if you wanted to go back and look at those for clarity. My favourites were, Safe and Hunger.

aznphoenixx November 16 2010, 23:00:01 UTC

Aww, thank you!

I was in class when I posted this. Not the best time to beta, I agree. Hunger came out of nowhere, that's why I love it so much College student is perpetually hungry anyways.

zerrat November 18 2010, 04:38:14 UTC

Lol, is no. 33 a reference to the Aya Brea costume in Duodecium?! If so, that is awesome. If not, doubly awesome!

Don't usually like the 50 sentence prompts, since often they're incredibly bland and you can tell the author is struggling to relate it to the topic at hand. You've done really well, lots of variety and showing pre, during and post-game snippets.

Particularly liked 25, 28, 32, 36 and 47.

*thumbs up*

aznphoenixx November 18 2010, 04:57:01 UTC

Definitely a reference to Aya Brea. Good catch.

They are! I did struggle quite a bit because they were not going in a direction I wanted. I tried hard to recapture the magic of "Hard to Explain", with the whole theme geared towards that.

But I thought to myself: they're sisters. They're surrounded by the mundane. So write about it. And I experimented with the writing style, like linking #18 and #22 together. Only in a different POV.