SO I HEARD YOU LIKE CHICKEN

[greasemunkygal]

IT'S THAT TIME AGAIN nevermind it's a day late cause I fail

Guess what guys? It's time fooooor...

HOW'S MY DRIVING?
aka HMD.

ONE: Post one comment listing all of your current characters. This can be done with either your character's journal or your personal one - So long as the comment is there and includes everyone you now play!

TWO: Be sure to

Comments

Re: Teal

[not_your_gun]

Ryuu!

You've been playing for a long time, and I think you've developed soem really good habits and some really bad ones.

In terms of crit, I think you're going to have to work on controlling your temper.

People dont know you--they only know OF you, and can only see how you react based off of how you are reacting in this game. The only way to build their confidence so that they'll post to you NOT anonymously is to act mature and gracious when people DO post anonymously. Even if you feel that being critiqued anonymously is not valid, the community allows for it and is alright with it, and your previous reactions to it have made you seem distant and unapproachable. Sometimes good points have come up in anonymous crit! My suggestion is to live with it for a time, just so that people can see that you DON'T bite heads off at all critique, and you'll find that you get more of what you're looking for from people who have more confidence to speak to you face to face.

For Starscream, I've always really liked how you made his character. He's really, really great with the others from his universe, and you're doing really great with making it feel like the three of them came from the same war and have long-established relationships with each other. It is very natural! I also greatly enjoy the tiny bits of background that you add on--his references to situations that you've added to the past really enrich his character, and they're adorable to boot.

If I had a suggestion to make, it would be to tone down the dramatics a bit in your context, and just make Starscream's actions simpler...or, just in general, add less external modifiers that call an outside judgment on your own character: IE go with: 'Starscream performed the action as he'd expected to' instead of 'Starscream performed the action with flawless grace'
He'd not be considering his grace when he's moving (most of the time) so it was odd to see in the action in the same brackets as his thoughts.

Shockwave is lovely. Every time I read you doing him I shiver in delight. I've really appreciated how you've been working with me to make what you do with him fit in with where I want to steer him, and I think its been brilliant so far. <3