Fanfiction: No.1 Fan (Part 5/5: A Dream Is A Wish Your Heart Makes)

[avery_averette]

Characters: Tackey and ? (to be revealed in today's entry)
Pairing: Tackey and ?
Genre: Angst, AU, fluff, romance
Rating: PG 
Summary: Takki has a dream, a beautiful dream. But it also means sacrifice, hurt and pain. In the face of such obstacles, would he have the courage to chase after it?
Disclaimer: The boys are dreamboats that have sailed far

Comments

[yamapiislove]

Awe, this whole series was awesome.
Looks like I was wrong about Pi XD
It was great. I loved it.

[avery_averette]

I'm sorry. I'm so sorry. *Bows down low.*
It never occurred to be that T-chan could be mistaken for Pi. But 'T' can indeed stand for Tomohisa after all.
This 5-part is actually a test drive for another 30-part story in which Pi will be the lead. I had originally intended it to be a daily update but I realise that I can barely handle 5 not to mention 30. So that story will only be out later and maybe not as a daily updated series.
Thank you for reading!

[snow_meow]

Thank you for the fic.
I am glad that it was a good ending and Takki didn't marry that girl

However, I find that this chapter feel a bit disjointed.

First Takki was dreaming, then he woke up.
Next he went to shop for a ring? I was so confused if he was shopping for another ring to proposed or it was a flashback of him shopping for the proposal ring.

Then it jumps to the orphanage where he learns the truth and he is not really like surprise that T-chan is Tsubasa?

I just feel like you pieces all the different bits into this chapter but without any links between them

[avery_averette]

Thank you so much for your detailed comments. They're much appreciated. Because of your feedback, I've added more info into the story, which should help others better understand it.
I guess hurried work shows. And I too shouldn't expect readers to be able to read minds too. LOL. My bad.
Thank you again. It's very nice to have help to improve on the stories.

[snow_meow]

Thank you for the improvements.
It really helps a lot in understanding this chapter better.

[dorayaki_chan]

Aaaaaaaaaw I am so dead dead X) you just gave me T & T madness attack X3

[avery_averette]

Thank you for taking time out of your hotel game! Now with T&T in you, give it your best shot, let your hotel domination begin!

[kaitovsheiji]

Here I am!
This chapter was a little bit confusing but I love the end n.~
It's sweet~ especially the kids' part ^__^
Thank you for sharing your fic!

[avery_averette]

I'm sorry. I'm so sorry. *Bows down low.*
You're not alone. Another commenter has found it confusing too, so I've added more info into the story, which should help the understanding it.
I guess hurried work shows. And I too shouldn't expect readers to be able to read minds. LOL. My bad.
Thank you again. It's very nice to have feedback like this so that the stories can improve. Many thanks!

[fancyann1974]

loved this whole story, sorry i didnt see it as you were writing it...but happy i got to read it all the way thru at one time.
thank you loved it

[avery_averette]

Thank you for enjoying it!
Your eyeballs at any point of time, is most welcomed! I'm happy enough that someone else reads it, so it doesn't matter whether it's one time through or in bits.
Many thanks again for stopping by.