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i wrote this, this morning. first poem i have written in a long time. its probably the most complex poem i have ever written but it makes a lot more sense in an e.e cummings style rather than a typical line by line read. a lot of the initial mistakes you read are on purpose.
"as we were"
as we were : [ while
i wait f( the gates
to open )or
you : i lift
up
so we can see
free, : "are we
fri end?"
li( we hear )ght : within
but are only to see ourselves ]
once along a flowering fear
----
if you dont want to read how it is written;
which is why this poem works well (i think)
then read this (if you are lazy):::::::::::
while i wait for the gates to open
i lift you up so we can see
"are we free, friend?"
within light we hear
but are only to see ourselves as we were
once along a flowering fear
"as we were"
as we were : [ while
i wait f( the gates
to open )or
you : i lift
up
so we can see
free, : "are we
fri end?"
li( we hear )ght : within
but are only to see ourselves ]
once along a flowering fear
----
if you dont want to read how it is written;
which is why this poem works well (i think)
then read this (if you are lazy):::::::::::
while i wait for the gates to open
i lift you up so we can see
"are we free, friend?"
within light we hear
but are only to see ourselves as we were
once along a flowering fear