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The Movement of the Earth -- Chapter 12

Oct 16, 2010 12:18

Title: The Movement of the Earth
Author: audreyii_fic
Fandom: Twilight (Team Jacob)
Rating: T
Characters: Bella, Jacob, Charlie, and others (J/B)
Genre: Romance/Angst/Wolfpack!Humor
Warnings: Language, violence, and references to adult behavior

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Comments 91

anonymous October 17 2010, 02:10:37 UTC

That was amazing. Bravo.

audreyii_fic October 17 2010, 02:21:54 UTC

Thanks! :D

arysani October 17 2010, 02:14:51 UTC

Hey, vampires are crazy flammable. Good to know.

And a taunting Victoria always seems a more realistic Victoria - I forget she gets a crap death later on.

(And I kept thinking, for some sick, sick reason, what with the feline metaphors SMeyer always used with vamps plus Bella's great idea here, about that "how do you make a cat sound like a dog" joke - drench it in gasoline & throw a match, it goes "woof!"...somehow it felt weirdly appropriate...but still sick. And wrong. I like cats...)

audreyii_fic October 17 2010, 02:24:01 UTC

LOL. The flammability seems to be canon (I mean, dude, they just burst into flame with practically no effort), and then I went ahead and reinforced it with a conversation earlier in the fic. Flammable vampires, interestingly, is practically the ONLY damn thing Meyer used for her vamps that's part of the general mythology.

Her death was TOTALLY crap. All of that and we got nothing. Stupid Meyer.

(And that's wrong -- so wrong -- yet I'm giggling. My cats are looking at me. I think they know.)

sleepy_sheep683 October 17 2010, 15:45:31 UTC

"LOL. The flammability seems to be canon (I mean, dude, they just burst into flame with practically no effort),"

It totes is. Meyer specifically said it in one of those 'personal correspondence' things (I'm not a fan on the twilight lexicon- mainly because they seem to be harbouring under the delusion that these books are some wonderful literary triumph- but it's useful for checking facts without having to read the books again *shudders at the thought*). She describes the venom that runs through their circulatory system as being more flammable than gasoline, I believe.

audreyii_fic October 19 2010, 01:10:29 UTC

The Twilight Lexicon is useful for searching the 'personal correspondence' cannon. Otherwise, it's kind of crap; the listed information is usually somewhat extrapolated beyond absolute canon. For bare bones "This is in the book exactly like this", Twilight Wiki is the place to go.

caddyeverafter7 October 17 2010, 02:24:56 UTC

This was my favourite chapter, I think. Seriously. Victoria is such a cunning creature, I couldn't believe how Meyer wrote her in Eclipse. I died inside. But I loved this chapter so much. The emotion... the dialog... oh my gosh. You're killing me. Haha. :)

audreyii_fic October 19 2010, 01:14:48 UTC

Hee, thanks :) Yeah, Victoria was Meyer's Missed Opportunity #92013. Glad you liked this... and don't die now, we're so close to the end!

sungodis October 17 2010, 02:26:56 UTC

That was freaking fantastic! I love how you are able to stay true to her character, but show growth in a way that Bella actually becomes interesting!

audreyii_fic October 19 2010, 01:15:35 UTC

Thank you :D True to character + Bella growth = major backflipping. I think I pulled something.

spoonz_10 October 17 2010, 02:55:39 UTC

This was such an awesome chapter. Period.

I loved Victoria in the books. She was kick-ass. But her ending in Eclipse was ten kinds of stupid, and it ticked me off. Meyer over-played her role, had all of this masive build-up, and then ended her without any big scene. (Kinda how the entire series ended. Hmm, I'm sensing a pattern here.) It felt like a betrayal to Victoria's character to kill her off so lamely.

That is why this chapter was awesome. You effectively built Viccy's character almost in ONE CHAPTER way better than Meyer did in THREE BOOKS. AND you (hopefully? I mean, she IS dead. Right?!) gave her a fitting death. In my mind, a villian should only die if the Hero (or Heroine) outsmarts them fair n' square. You my dear, have acheived this, and I congratulate you for it. =)

I have a sore throat too. We can be miserable together! :D

audreyii_fic October 19 2010, 01:21:49 UTC

Thanks :) Eclipse sucked in about sixty ways, but seriously, the finale with Victoria was TEH SUCK. Seriously, she got one line of dialogue in the entire series. One. After all that.

I think what I hated most was that in that scene, she practically ignored Edward to get at Bella. I mean, yeah, okay, she wanted to kill Bella very badly, but wouldn't she pay the *slightest* attention to Edward? Her fury and anger at *Bella* never made sense to me. Bella should have been irrelevant, an utterly meaningless tool by which to hurt Edward, who was the real villain in Victoria's mind. So... yeah. You fail, Meyer. I wanted to correct a bit of the fail. Glad you think I succeeded.

Misery loves company ;)