The Definiton of Want - Chapter 1

[audreyii_fic]

Title: The Definition of Want
Author: audreyii_fic
Fandom: Twilight (Team Jacob)
Rating: M
Characters: Bella, Jacob, Edward, and others (J/B)
Genre: Romance/Humor/Angst -- you know, all the good ones.
Warnings: Bad language and eventual sex.

Summary: You know how Edward offered to let Bella and Jacob make puppies? And we all secretly wondered how that

Comments

[runningsissors]

YOU!

Jacob. His voice is, like, guhh... and you wrote it, like, guhhh... and I just can't even form words right now. Seriously, woman, like I have no words. I'll break it down to caveman talk. IT GOOD!

Everything was perfect and yeah, but the entire time I was reading there was this little voice in the back of my head repeating "don't make bella have a baby. don't make bella have a baby. don't make bella hav..." I think you get the idea. So glad someone addressed the fact that Bella's only eighteen, and generally speaking (there's always exceptions) that's just not an acceptable age to be having a kid. And Jacob's only sixteen. Sixteen. God, I just don't get the appeal to young parenthood.

rantover/

anyway, fantastic start!

[audreyii_fic]

Jacob. His voice is, like, guhh... and you wrote it, like, guhhh...
Hee :) I'm really, really glad to hear that that worked for you -- this is my first shot at first-person for this fandom, and it's always a bit nerve-wracking. So yay!

the entire time I was reading there was this little voice in the back of my head repeating "don't make bella have a baby.
Yeah, J/B baby fics that are all smiles make me squidge slightly (and not in the good way). The unfortunate thing is that after Eclipse, everyone is so emotionally fucked six ways from Sunday that there's no real bastion of stability aside from someone who might appear later, we'll see, I haven't decided yet...

Anyway -- yay feedback! :D I'm glad you liked it so far.

[annegables]

This is seriously good. Will be watching for the next chapter.

[audreyii_fic]

Thank you! I'm not sure what my update rate will be, but I'm hoping the gaps won't be too long.

[ashletd]

Okay, you HAVE to keep writing this. It's not that often that I get this sucked into a fic after one chapter. Jacob sounds completely authentic and everything flows so well and in a very believable way.

[audreyii_fic]

Ooh! Thank you! And yes, (muse willing) it will continue :)

[the_angry_pixie]

hmmm interesting. very interesting. i honestly have no idea how you will be able to pull this off and convince me that it is okay since even if the end result (yes im jumping straight to the end) is Bella choosing Jacob and having a baby with him I will still be unhappy. Cause I'm just one of those people that mourns a little bit everytime i see young parents. I can't help thinking "oh theyre so young... they're going to miss out on so much...". Thats why i never like stories about Jacob and Bella having babies while they are still young.

buuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuut. I love your writing. so there is no way I am going to miss out on the opportunity for you to convince me otherwise. Your writing is entertaining enough and so, so in charater! :)

[audreyii_fic]

Wow. I'm humbled by the fact that you think enough of my writing that you're going to stick with me in spite of your distaste for this sort of story :) I'm not kidding, it really means a lot to me :) I pinky-swear, I will do my best not to let you down.

[runsamrun]

MULTICHAPTER YAY!

Lovelovelovelovelove. Need I sat more? :)

[audreyii_fic]

:D Thanks! (Admittedly my reaction was more "Multichapter what the HELL am I thinking", but I guess that's the difference between being the writer and the reader, isn't it? Heh.)