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Advice

Apr 12, 2010 20:57

Title: Advice
Author: audreyii_fic
Fandom: Twilight (Team Jacob)
Rating: R (language)
Characters: Jacob/Bella
Genre: Romance/Humor

Summary: The bikes are nearly done. Bella is sad and Jacob tries to help. Hallucinations abound. A mid-New Moon Garage Fic. As per usual, I make no claims to originality.

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( At least you can punch your friends. You can't punch your sisters. Not once you've hit puberty and outweigh them by sixty pounds. )

Comments 56

silverstcloud April 13 2010, 02:09:39 UTC

GOD THIS IS SO PERFECT I DON'T HAVE COHERENT FEEDBACK (not that I usually do)
You're an awesome author and I don't think you should stop *pouts*

audreyii_fic April 13 2010, 03:04:14 UTC

Thank you! (Though I have to stop. I HAVE TO STOP.)

latesthero April 13 2010, 02:14:28 UTC

:)

I'm officially in love with your stories.

audreyii_fic April 13 2010, 03:05:08 UTC

My stories snorgle you in return :)

thankthatstar April 13 2010, 02:22:53 UTC

this. was. perfect.

!!!!!!!!!!!!

that's all that i can say at this point. :)

audreyii_fic April 13 2010, 03:05:47 UTC

Hee. Thanks! :)

_argustar April 13 2010, 02:49:25 UTC

This is the last one, I swear. I'm done after this. I can quit any time I want!

Sure, that's what they all say.

Though, now I'm left with the same predicament I had with "Postcards." How the hell can a coherent review be done? It's like walking up to Stravinsky and going "Hey, that 'Rite of Spring' thing? Awesome stuff."

Anyway, you write teenage boy thoughts extremely well. I loved Jacob's little internal debates with his sisters and the guys, especially the bits about needing to get pussy to be pussy-whipped and Jake staying a virgin and his ideas for how to kill Edward Cullen and if I continued to list the awesome, I'd probably wind up quoting the entire fic back at you.

audreyii_fic April 13 2010, 03:12:39 UTC

Eep, definitely not Stavinsky. My guess is that Rite of Spring wasn't written as Stravinsky stood in the shower, trying to get baby spit up out of his hair. (Then again, it's always possible.)

you write teenage boy thoughts extremely well.

Thank you! Boys always seem easier to write than girls... as a general rule, girls are fuckin' insane, whereas boys are straightfoward but kinda clueless. (Yes, that's a horrible stereotype, but in the realm of fictional characters it's usually true.)

likexaxdove April 13 2010, 05:21:55 UTC

I really enjoyed this!!

Perfect Jacob, seriously.

Can't wait to read more from you!

audreyii_fic April 13 2010, 14:00:15 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad Jacob was perfect -- the thing is, he's not that different from a character in another fandom I used to write for, and I felt like I kind of slipped into that other character's narrative voice as I went along (to my annoyance). I'm glad it was still okay, though that's something I really need to work on. (Well, I'd work on it if I wrote more fic. WHICH I'M TOTALLY NOT GOING TO DO. REALLY. ACK!)